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Candlewitch
Candlewitch
Jul 10, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Melt Down

Melt Down
by: eddy styx

she was leg art
moving fast
at a maddening pace
she pushed her way
passed my quivering gel
of consciousness
to stop before me
hands on hips
legs wide apart
in triumph
I
being of
limp hands and mind
fell to my knees at her feet
in subjugation
gibbering gobbledygook
and nonsense
between her elongated legs
I thought of nothing more
than twiddling her twaddle
encased in her
fleeting internal ecstasy
for which someday
I vowed to even the score!

— Candlewitch, Jul 10, 2010

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Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Tee he

I don't have a clue what this is about, but I found it very funny and well written, so I'll give you my thoughts... It sounds to me like a battle with something/someone stronger, but only for a time, as strength will prevail in the end rather than false power. Probably got it all wrong, but it’s good to use one’s own imagination, I hope!!! Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear rosina

You discovered a new way of seeing my poem. I didn't realize it until you said so. You are very close. Thank you, sweet lady. Always, Eddy/Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dearest ~

WOWOW ~! lol ... gotta love eddy smile love and big hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Cat

My girl , you need to give that Eddy a talking to lol. Good piece of writing Chrys
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Chrys

I would, but I'm afraid he wouldn't listen. He is a letch. Love, Eddy/Cat
Geezer

Geezer

16 years ago

I think I understand...

perfectly! LOL. Great write! I read this one over a couple of times, and it still meant the same thing each time I read it, so I guess i got it right the first time, right mistress? Right? huh? LOL, great fun...~ Gee
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years ago

Styx

It seems Mr Styx has a one-tracked mind...the dirty bugger! I actually laughed at this piece, not sure if I should have done, but I feel I know Eddy quite well and know exactly what he was thinking. I enjoyed the whole piece, but I really liked: gibbering gobbledygook - hilarious! love, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear HS

LOL, Eddy does have a sense of humor, just a little on the sick side and he resents when some women intimidate him. Yes, you do know eddy very well. Always, eddy/cat
faithmairee

faithmairee

16 years ago

Dear Cat

I love your poem from it's excellent title to the great ending. Your use of language is wonderful as is your delivery. Good strong writing, Cat. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Faith

I am so glad you enjoyed this piece written by my male alter ego, Eddy Styx. Thank you for your comment. Always, eddy/cat

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