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Fine work indeed, only I might change in the seventh line "Into ashes" I might just put "to ashes" as it eases the flow. that is just a thought. but I liked the poem. john

A really great read, but it left me craving for a bit more! Superb theme, and wonderful use of language! Do it some more, Please!

I agree that to ashes might work a bit better And I agree with Lonnie. This was just a tease my friend to better and more wonderful things as only you can write Chrys

I really liked the comparison of smoke and soul and how the remnants of both outlive the source.......scribbler

Very nice indeed and sorry I have not been by to visit you lately. I really enjoyed this write of yours and hope to catch up with you soon. Retreat to the weekend Mona xoxoxo

Brilliant poem with beautiful images. "Give me a wisp of smoke on its spiral I will rise" ...I love it. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

This poem superb. And I do love the after thought about the Rubick's cube, lol. But these are my favorite lines: Give me a wisp of smoke on its spiral I will rise far beyond the farthest reaches and deepest spaces of this universe so beautiful and thought provoking Always, Cat

I am late but ... sigh wonderful poem bravo nothing to change love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Great flow and use of language...a profound poem! Very nicely written, Raj! Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

this is a poem to ponder the smallness and also vastness of the human living in these tiny bodies, while our souls long to be freed to fly with the universe.... thanks for giving us such good food for thought, Raj! hello again from Denmark, land of gentle flowing water and quiet green forests... Love Leigh "The true miracle is not walking on water or walking in air, but simply walking on this earth." Thich Nhat Hanh

I think, I would like to think we are kind of on a same wavelength! I love the poem. The only difference, I would chose to be the smoke…. lol. I am strange. I smoke and have watched the smoke Spiral up until it dissipates ….all kinds of things can run through ones head. We ponder the fantastic’s and think of possibilities…and then we come back to reality and as you put it ‘ toy with our Rubik’s Cube. Very whimsical. I wouldn’t change a thing. Always, Tonya

i marvel at the language you used. an inteligent poem

Ann of Norway Oh the will-o-the-wisp of smoke rising and rising and spiralling upwards, and then the most wonderful carbon footprints they are to be seen on the clouds that encircle the planets moon's, their beautiful journeys ever spiralling on into infinity.... A musical smoke sails into the space that surrounds us and lets us know that once, you were here; beautiful. Love Ann