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Your Loving Eyes

Keith,Sir with Thanks for the edit and giving a SOUL to my eyes.

Your eyes a beauty so lovely and true
The gift of sight I want only from you.
As you look into my wondering eyes
A wave of emotion in me does arise.

And how I’ve become so very eager,
To possess you in a full view fever
And “Oh my God” if only you knew,
How much I yearn and love to see you.

Your eyes give me a lustrous shine
I wish in this world were only mine.
But hope a special someone will some day
Drown in your lovely eyes and play

But before I go the world shall see
Those eyes they once belonged to me.
So give up your own before it’s too late;
For many aspirants wait at your gate.

Someone will love to look through these
The sight they ’ll make will surely please.
But some later day do remember the blind
For my lovely eyes another will find.

When of all these, we really have no need
Below the earth we will lie cold indeed.
Your eyes are for me,
For me
For me
Mine are only yours
As long as life endures.
But surely as time passes along
Then someone else will play your song
And us to ourselves will no more belong.


— loved, Jul 09, 2010

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Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Loved

I see my Big Brothers hand in this one well done you and well done Keith/prof if I am correct lol love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
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raj

15 years 11 months ago

Loved

i find this write very captivating and powerfully enticing...there is also an element of mystery...which makes the reader crave to see those mysteriously beautifull eyes which inspired this poetry... it reminded me of the lines of a song i once wrote...which goes like this.. When i look deep in your eyes i see butterflies when i kiss them on their lids in glee they flutter and fly love to glide on those wings and feel at home in your eyes warmly..raj (sublime_ocean)...
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

UR WONderful commen

thanks for spending so much time and effort of urs whilst commenting i'm grateful to uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu i shall take this opportunity to thank each one of you individually for spot lighting me and hope u shall read more of me my thanks to thee to thee to thee..
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ziggy

15 years 11 months ago

hi

hi great write one of your best as I see it well done ,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

beautiful words of ur songdo

beautiful words of ur song do u think any of mine can be Musified some have like GOING BANANAS AND AQUARIUS
SH

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Eyes!

Dearest Loved eyes are so precious as is this amazing poem so powerful and beautiful, my favourite stanza is "i love them all" with much love shirley harrison
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

without your encouragement where would I HAVE BEEN??? THANKS

SHIRLEY u give me the expression of a poet which i love... ere.... i fail as one, thanks go to you so have some weekend fun i shall take this opportunity to thank each one of you individually for spot lighting me and hope u shall read more of me my thanks to thee to thee to thee..
SH

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

i am your biggest Fan!

ere i read you come what may! Twas the 6th night of the bright moon when loved did come to brighten up the Room!!! shirley harrison
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

eyes

I think both the overt and implied messages were very well put in this inSIGHTful write.Well done and worthy of my or anybody's nom........scribbler
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

thanks for the spot light

i shall take this opportunity to thank each one of you individually for spot lighting me and hope u shall read more of me my thanks to thee to thee to thee..
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

i shall take this

i shall take this opportunity to thank each one of you individually for spot lighting me and hope u shall read more of me my thanks to thee to thee to thee..
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Loved

I agree with Zigs, one of your best. Superb. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

the stars

like you all do shine and i smile at all the stars i gather coz u all r soooooooooo very kind kind... and kind...........
faithmairee

faithmairee

15 years 11 months ago

Wonderfully Written

I agree with zigs and xena about this poem being one of your best ones. It's wonderfully written. I applaud you! Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

thanks i knew

u would like it gr88 feelings one gets when friends read it ur gr88888888888888
mona

mona

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Loved

you are always surprising me with your poems,I feel you have endless imaginations and poems need to come out ,I love your poem its charming one Your Loving Eyes Mona
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

my memory

and imagination are gift divine i love drinking wine and you should help me to my poetry refine... thanks, thanks and thanks
K

KingINwaiting

15 years 11 months ago

Nice. this is the first poem

Nice. this is the first poem ive read on here. (im new). Great job. i really enjoyed it
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

thanks fot ur maiden comments

and hope you will again commend as you journey through the passage of time and together we communicate in melodious rhyme. we shall rhyme.... rhyme and .... rhyme
A

Ammus

15 years 11 months ago

god bless them

ammus I always year to extend a helping hand To them whose hand always extend to dark But this gave me a new light To light them up by ending the darkness
Kailashana

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

*Communicate in melodious

*Communicate in melodious rhyme*....the heart in love (and loved) communicates. Keith may have had a hand in this poem, and by his name alone raised your poem to *melodious rhyme*. (IMO). Is it enough for Neopoet? Most certainly. Is rhyme enough for a Pulitzer Prize or the Pushcart? Not in recent history. Perhaps if you read a little Neruda, Loved. You'll understand what I mean. Congratulations, and be free from all constraints. Love and Light, Anna "There is a kind of mysticism to writing." ~ Irvine Welsh
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

I am a simple

...straight forward naive person after years of tact expressed about my naitivity...(BY OTHERS) i realised they meant i was A PLAIN AND SIMPLE FOOL RATHER AN IDIOT POLITELY put TILL TODAY, YET i know now u don't mean that i am still naive ....HOPEFULLY .KIETH OR NOT >>>> Laugh and the world laughs with u smile and we all smile with uuuUUUUU and if one chooses to weep let em alone that'll do thanks glad u meant good toooooooooo