Dark night

this is a poem I can relate to. something I have always thought but never put on paper. wondered if was bipolar in reverse? Linda

I like this very much! I enjoy the rhythm in your words... The way you smoothly return to the fact, that you always prefered the night. As a lover of the night, and confirmed nocturnal soul, I can appreciate what you're saying here. Beautiful. Gentle regards, Raven-Shakti A robin redbreast in a cage Puts all heaven in a rage. -William Blake

This is great, I love it. So now that you've made the first step, you have to share more of your work with us. Well done. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Goodness... Did you read my mind? Or is it that you are a brother in arms? Fellow pilgrim on the road of solitary insomnia? Beautifully done.

Xena, now that you have taken that first step, you are trapped in the land of Neopoetland! You will spend years and years, writing of your adventures here, and trying to figure out the meaning of life. LOL. Welcome! ~ Geezer

Kinda short, but why go on when all is said and you've concluded perfectly? Only two little changes I can suggest: "Now I spend my nights alone Waiting for the company of sunrise." (I shifted the period to the next line, as it's one sentence.) And since only one line starts with a minuscule, you could put a cap on it. Otherwise great, welcome aboard! Antoine

I’ve always preferred the night But recently it’s been too dark An uncomfortable darkness that makes you feel too paranoid to sleep. Now I spend my nights alone. Waiting for the company of sunrise And when it comes I’m always disappointed I’ve always preferred the night. Night is a dark preference paranoid and sleeping my nights alone in the company of sunrise are darker then light Work on being succinct, it empowers your imagery.Step outside yourself and strive for universality. Remember that poetry is above all an art form where each word is a brush stroke that either adds or detracts from the composition. Now teach me something.We are all students.

Nice to meet you. I too am a lover of the night. I think, like you, my soul is filled with the night. Raven has said to you what I would have. Exquisitely dark poem. Always, Cat

welcome to neo i like this a lot the conversational tone disguises the undertone "But recently it’s been too dark An uncomfortable darkness that makes you feel too paranoid to sleep" for me, these 3 lines give an added glimpse into the characters psyche and make the write more than being just about his preference for night i like that you don't beat the reader over the head with anything obvious... there's a hint of something dark [pun intended!] a small suggestion~ the last line could pehaps be a floating line...just to give added emphasis merely a thought nothing wrong at all as it stands now cheers p

Welcome to Neo again and we are happy to have you, I see after all your comments and remarks that you are on your way. I like this poem and only thing I would change is breaking it down a bit. If you need any help or would like any suggests I always ask first and yes I seen you checked out raw truth so I will await your decision for after all it is your work Happy to have you here Mona

Hi this poem really made feel what it must be like to long for dawn as well as the cover of night. Good stuff Lou xx