faithmairee

Jul 08, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

declaration of love

oh little trembling bee
i am finely tuned in
(to your wavelength)
and turned on by
your swaying body

thus i announce my desire
little bee my heart racing
at your name’s mention
pale faced and weak in the
knees (when you’re near)

i love your sweet glances
with all the chances
we are taking while trying
to disguise our inclination
toward one another

oh my little honey bee
you seem to stare so curiously
you’re my soul’s happiness
and it’s torment supreme
oh little trembling bee—
hover over me

— faithmairee, Jul 08, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Florida, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Lawrence Ferlinghetti, Edna St. Vincent Millay, Lucille Clifton and Elizabeth Bishop

Critiques

Roscoe Lane

16 years ago

I love it,

simple but very effective, a beautiful poem, Regards Roscoe..

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You, Roscoe

Thank you so much, Roscoe. I appreciate your wonderful remarks. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

greeneyes

16 years ago

Pretty and soothing, I loved

Pretty and soothing, I loved it.

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thanks So Much

I appreciate your wonderful remarks so much! Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

xena465

16 years ago

I'm terrified of bees, wasps and blue-bottles, but it’s only the buzzing that gets me. I think with bumble bees when you look at them closely, they are pretty, furry and cute. So if I ignore my fear and read your lovely words, then I too would love a trembling little bumble bee to hover over me. PS. I noticed that this poem has been accidentally submitted three times. The site was acting a bit strange yesterday. You could delete the other two, to save confusion, via the edit. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You, Xena

Thank you as always for your feedback. The bee in this poem symbolizes a suitor/beloved one. Your comments reminded me of how terrified I used to be of bees. I've overcome it to a greater extent though. I tried to delete the extra copies of this but only one would delete. I'll try again. Thanks so much for your lovely comments. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

xena465

16 years ago

Hi Faith

I think you can only delete one a day. I'm not sure? I tried to delete two poems once too and only one would delete, so maybe you could try again in the next day or so. PS. Just noticed that you managed to delete them both. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Mari Shine

16 years ago

I just love this delightful

I just love this delightful metaphoric write Faith. It is very nicely penned and with lovely imagery. It is very well expressed and flows as smooth as silk. It is a very tender write filled with romance and love for someone so special and I adore how you have a pet name for him! Beautiful! The poem flows warmly from your loving heart Faith and the last two lines are the icing on the poetic cake for me. They make this poem a truly resplendent poetic pen gem! Thank You so very much for sharing Faith. Blessings, Light & Peace..........

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You, Mari

I am honored by your wonderful remarks. You made my heart smile. Thank you so much for reading and responding to my poem. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

scribbler

16 years ago

love

Used to catch bees in bare hands.Like your alluded to suitor they respond well to gentle touch.Enjoyable read......scribbler

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You, Stan

Many thanks for your feedback...A real bee in my hands? Not there yet...lol. But I have a healthy respect for them. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

shirley harrison

16 years ago

BUZ BUZ LOVE LOVE

Dear Faith, this poem is so warm and gentle also fun and beautifully written much love shirley harison

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thanks, Shirley

I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem. Thanks for stopping by to read it. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

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