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lou
lou
Jul 07, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Tortured

You left me waiting
pain searing and piercing
rending the heart muscle useless
and yet still beating within my breast
organ of torture, burning a hole 
through the chest

Blood courses through the artiries
pulsing through my ear drums
clammy palid skin , turns into
scorching , scarlette flesh

streaked in sweat , culminating
in tear stained pillows and
bitter regret

— lou, Jul 07, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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M

magics02

16 years ago

Wow Lou

You must really be mad at someone or is this an alter ego one? LOL Will be by to talk to you been under the weather with an injury I sustained at work and now have to go see Orthopedic Surgeon (my Knee) man it is a hurting so. talk soon Love Mona
lou

lou

16 years ago

AWWW

Im sorry your hurt love lou
lou

lou

16 years ago

ta

TA, lou xx
SH

shirley harrison

16 years ago

pain and anger!

very powerful lou! really great write! lou, there is only one thing i dont like its the title it doesnt give this fantastic poem justice "sorry" if you would like me to make some ideas i will be happy too! with much love shirley harrison
lou

lou

16 years ago

Shirley

You were right the title was crap, so i changed it. Thanks lou xx
S

scribbler

16 years ago

tortured

strong emotive write.by the way misspelled "arteries"........scribbler
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Lou

A great strong write. It's good for the soul to write it all down...well done. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
loved

loved

16 years ago

THE ONLY PLACE BLOOD CAN'T FLOW

is the ear drum i am deaf so this much i know the wax jams all vibrations what did u say i don't know but lovely words through my mind do flow urs ... urs.... urs u don't like it 3x times so cut it read it at once as one lovedly, lovely poem urs
lou

lou

16 years ago

Ta

Ta Lou xx

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