ziggy

Jul 07, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

LAND AHOY

scrub the deck on the old wooden
wreck and off to sea once more,
with a heave and a ho the rigging
lifts slow to catch the wind that blows.

commander and chief at the helm
of his belief with a gush and a
creek of to seek next port of call.

mariners nautical pride crossing the
great divide by day and night lantern
light a faint guide through when celestial
navigation hangs aloft behind a shroud of cloud.

sea legs step sprightly on lee side it`s
motion to and fro, captain knows the way to go
till end of journey day shouts" land ahoy!".

— ziggy, Jul 07, 2010

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xena465

16 years ago

Nice one Zigs

I love the sea journey. I used to date a merchant seaman, he was gorgeous. Just a couple of things I noticed that may need an edit… wreck and {of} to sea once more, ………..[off] sea legs step sprightly on lee side {it`s } ……………[its] Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

ziggy

16 years ago

hi

ah so you fell for the sailor boy lol and cheers the critique i must amend ,,,,,,,,,zigs thank you ,have a good one

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Ziggy

I agree with Xenas suggestions ... but think its a great sea faring poem none the less good work Zig's love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

ziggy

16 years ago

hi jayne

again thank you for the comment yes i must amend thank you ,,,,,zigs

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Ziggy

I think it's brilliant and I love the rhyme scheme. I'm a sucker for songs and poems about the sea. My favorite lines: scrub the deck on the old wooden wreck and off to sea once more, with a heave and a ho the rigging lifts slow to catch the wind that blows. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years ago

hi cat

hi cat i knew little about sea poetry before writting this had to look up a few terms and as always thank you for pointing out your fav lines, have a great weekend my friend, thank you for that address in the pm i have that sent now will chat you soon ,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

Caramel swiral

16 years ago

Greetings Ziggy

I thought it fine, it was full of visions of mine when just a young girl, I used to set sail on the Lake of Michigan, with my Uncle as guide and the sturn behind, we set sail for the day of adventure and the wind in our face the world ahead and our troubles behind. So thanks for the memory I almost forgot, as I read your fine snapshot of some small space in the life in time. Thank-you, the swirlis caramel

ziggy

16 years ago

hi

hi there hello and thank you for the comment and how great is it when a poem can spark memories for someone, I await your first post as i visited your page just now you must be new here so welcome and see you around neo chat soon ,,,,,,zigs

Hooded Stranger

16 years ago

Ziggy

Zigs, I was immediately attracted to the sublime rhyming scheme, you work that style so well, in fact I know of nobody else who does it this way...unique and outstanding. You do have an ability to just grab a topic from the sky and then use your craft to create a statue of words. Good job and I hope you get spotlight with this one, well deserved indeed. HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

ziggy

16 years ago

hood

well hood ha can i say to a comment like that you honour me and thank you for it, lol spotlight me i don`t think so my corner gets darker with each passing post i make lol i truly hope you are feeling your self again and still taking it easy, and i cant go without saying ye still managed to get an english man on the pitch for the worldcup final the ref LOL ,,,,,,,,,,chat soon hood ,,,,,,,,,zigs

Hooded Stranger

16 years ago

Zigs

Zigs, we are good friends and I doubt we'll be able to offend each other so I have no problem calling your poems how I see them. So I really mean what I have said about this piece. It really was crap!...lol!..only kidding. You did make me laugh about your corner getting darker with each passing post! Trust me spotlight means nothing. You keep 'em coming, because they are all spotlights to me. I am feeling a lot better today, much stronger -thanks mate. I knew England would be in the final...but wearing white not black!! Lol! We must do that co-write. I am going to look at the one you sent me later today. I'll pm you later, after the final. regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

magics02

16 years ago

Hello Ziggy

How are you my friend? I like this write of yours but I got to tell you what I thought of when I seen the title and dont laugh ...I thought Chips Ahoy..lol you seen where my mind went to the cookies again? LMAO I hope all is fine by you got alot of catching up to do and sea poetry sure is sweet just like a chocolate chip upon the ship!! Ahoy Mate! Love at ya guy, miss ya Mona

ziggy

16 years ago

LOL

HI there lol or should i say " ahoy mate " or chips ahoy ,,,,,,,either way thank you ............zigs

loved

16 years ago

SOMETIMES WHEN I AM SEA

I MEAN MY MIND IS I THINK OF POETS LIKE YE SOMEDAY PERHAPS I TOO WILL BE LIKE YE IF U COMMENT ON ME AND HELP ME NOT TO BE ALL THE TIMES AT SEA.... AT SEA.... AT SEA...at sea please read in small case soory error f mine as am partially blind LOVELYLOVEDLYHONEYVISIONARY====ME

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