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The Shape of Two Hearts



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— faerybeki, Jul 07, 2010

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Kailashana

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

that’s called

that's called rapture... and you captured the feeling... love, Anna The whole modern world has divided itself into Conservatives and Progressives. The business of Progressives is to go on making mistakes. The business of the Conservatives is to prevent the mistakes from being corrected. G.K. Chesteron
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

beautiful

very clever and beautiful my love and wishes for the oyster to both of you love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
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magics02

15 years 11 months ago

Just lovely Fairy

very smart poem and I just love it and if you only can do it in red ink!! Great job here gal and nice pic of you also visit soon Love,Mona
faerybeki

faerybeki

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you Mona :) I think

Thank you Mona :) I think Anna managed to get a poem posted here in colour but I've only seen it that once! I did the piece straight to here, copying and pasting concrete/shape poetry never seems to work lol so b&w it will have to be :) Happy you found the poem successful and nice to see you, much love Beki xxx
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barbsdad2003

15 years 11 months ago

What ...

fun you're having! Is that allowed here? (Just askin.') Very nice effect. Like a streamer, like a school of fish in the sea, a group of fish that're just lined up for exit from the classroom in response to a fire drill. And then of course they leave in that flowing way they have with water. Very nice effect: Calming. With a meditative quality/feel. I like. Chuck
faerybeki

faerybeki

15 years 11 months ago

Chuck, i do hope it’s

Chuck, i do hope it's allowed ;) I love what you saw here, the fish :) and calming and medatative is just what we're hoping for for the birth :) much love Beki xxx
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Beki

The absolute perfection of form in poetry .. I think of all shape/concrete poetry this is my favourite ... and I have to say your wedding picture is stunning congratulations on all fronts lovely lol ;) dance some dervishes with Omi and when your bump can dance with you ;) lol ahh Beki you always make me smile love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
faerybeki

faerybeki

15 years 11 months ago

Always happy to make you

Always happy to make you smile darlin' :) glad you liked this one, the curves materialised with more ease than I expected :) we dance for you often Jayne, just bit more gently at the mo ;) love ya xxx
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

thats what

I call creativity and its LOVEDLY LOVEDLY LOVEDLY
faerybeki

faerybeki

15 years 11 months ago

Heehee Keith, lovely to see

Heehee Keith, lovely to see you :) it was actually much easier to transfer from head to page than I thought it would be!! Hope you're well, much love Beki xxx