The Wind Chamber

I feel a sort of calling,
to make some things, more clear;

this continuing, "drib-drabble"
is only what you hear !

I'm going to get some cameras
to film, as evidence;

showing all of the dreams,
still living well beyond the fence.

A Danger Zone surrounds me,
"chowing down" this weary soul;

it seems only I can see
that we all share a different goal.

I guess I'll just take care of mine
now that, our paths did cross;

I'm going to scoot right out of Dodge,
and try to, greatly cut my loss.

— docmaverick, Jul 06, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

Critiques

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

chamber

Only changes I might suggest would only make it sound more like something I would do and it's fine as is..........scribbler

docmaverick

15 years 11 months ago

I appreciate your voice, scribbler....

...I'm just not sure what you said. Seriously, I know what you mean. The best bet, is take what you need from mine, to start yours. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

poewriter58

15 years 11 months ago

Doc

Good to see you! Tiny suggestion Doc line 10 and swallows up, my weary soul I might suggest you drop the up and swallows my weary soul does not change the fact that your soul is being devoured hey how about devours my weary soul has more force to it and indicates it is being ravinously swallowed whole don't mind me just a though Chrys

docmaverick

15 years 11 months ago

Thanx, chrys....

...I reckon any of them work...not sure why I did, but I changed line #10. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

Antoinette Mar…

15 years 11 months ago

Excellent to me....

I wouldn't change a thought or thing about it...it is interesting though that I wish it was a longer write.....16 lines of your talent always leaves me wanting more. ...Antoinette Mari

docmaverick

15 years 11 months ago

Sorry 'bout that, Mom.....

...I guess I'm ALWAYS writing them too short, for you...eh ? I promise to really work on stretching 'em out a bit...okay ? Okay ! "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.