Seren

Jul 06, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

With Peaceful Easy Strokes

Slowly, but
with painstaking ease
I paint you out of my life

I mix the Grey
of ash and soot
into shade, ground
from between the leaves
of midnight and dawn

as the texture of you
begins the pale
to nothing

as each lift of the brush,
and every dab erased you
from the canvas of my life,
I realize,
I am overpainting each
and every particle
of you

I meditate on the good
but with regret I forget,
for in the remembering
burns a nothingness

I remix the colour
with a rainbows spray,
and I fill the void
where you once stood

too long
I stood in the background
of your Shadow painting

I am a now
mistress of my own easel
and my brush is reaching
out of the shadow
of you

— Seren, Jul 06, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Dennis Go

15 years 11 months ago

Sad but beautiful

This is such a sad piece. Shadow painting seems a little hard on your part specially on someone so dear. Excellent!

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

thank you for the lovely comment ... yeah this is a sad piece sometimes I try to transfer the essence of how I am feeling to the page .. this was an attempt love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

CyberSpace

15 years 11 months ago

Applause love always me

Applause love always me xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you love and big hugs

Thank you love and big hugs me x x x x x x x x x x x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Jayne

I love the title and your language usage is sublime. One line follows the other exquisitely without falter A sad poem on the surface, but sometimes it is best for all, if the slate, or the canvas is swept clean. It is like a rebirth. Love, Cat

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Cat

sometimes it is better to clean the slate but its painful none the less its the oldest friends that are hardest to forget Love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Bosscombat

15 years 11 months ago

:)

Killer, i pushed ya button and gave ya 5 clarots, and they were well deserved, party, party, disco party ♣

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

LOL

You Ratbag ... well I better go visit with you huh lol now that your here ~!~! naughty man should have told us you where coming up for a visit but a lovely surprise none the less big smile ... bloody good to see you both too love and biggest hugs JayKnee x x x x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

raj

15 years 11 months ago

Dear JayCee

such is the magic of your words ..figures of speech and sequencing that could acutally visualize the painter paint the picture live...stroke by each meaningful stroke... it is impossible to choose the favourite lines because each has a uniqueness of its own...e.g.....although "painstaking" and "ease" dont normally go together...you have expressed an emotion by placing them together...a master stroke .... having said that...i smiled and couldn't hold back the thought "how mean a female painter can be" ...lol... with much love...raj (sublime_ocean)...

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Raj

I admit there was a touch of callousness in this write :) some is real some is imaginated but all its a poem :) thanks for the wonderful comment I appreciate the read love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

raj

15 years 11 months ago

Dear JaCee

i do appreciate that the callousness in this write is part of the poetry and not to undermine anyone..it goes well with the flow and the mood.. let me clarify that my concluding remark "how mean a lady painter can get" was purely made in good humor... i appreciate Ms.JayCee Painter very much... love n hugs... raj (sublime_ocean)

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Raj

No need I knew it was said in humour lol big smile but thanks for coming back and clarifying anyway love and big hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

faithmairee

15 years 11 months ago

Beautifully Written

This is sad but beautfully written. I love it's depth and the words you have chosen are uniquely yours and made for excellent imagery. Great poem! Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Having to cut off a friend

Having to cut off a friend is hard but sometimes we have to do it for self presevation thanks for your comment and your thoughts I do appreciate it love and hugs JayCee x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

AH Jay-Cee!!

Would that ıt were as easy as you make ıt out to be!! :) and so poetıcally crafted! Tı amo Bonı

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Boni

No its never easy ... and I tried to get it out without, not sure I know it sounds easy but it was nearly like a cleansing you know ? writing this ..I still care about this person but their betrayal went too deep love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

strokes

beautiful allusions, but I have trouble seeing you in anyone's shadow......Stan

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Stan

You would be surprised the woman you know today ? hasnt been around that long I had to rediscover myself ... oh my I think the inspiration faery just visited lol thanks for your comment biggest hugs love JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

i got...

a visual of a canvas all streaked and dirty, being painted over by a beautiful sunrise with the swirls and daubs of vibrant color. A new beginning, with the glorious path of the future. ~ love and hugs ~ Gee

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Gee

Thank so much for the lovely comment huni ... ((higgliest bugs)) ... love JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Moloko D. Mahuma

15 years 11 months ago

Sad but beautiful

What a well written poem with a great title. You have given us an excellent depiction of your emotions and that's what I admire the most in a poet/poet. Love, Moloko

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Moloko

Coming from a fine young poetess as yourself i take that as high praise thank you for your kind words they are very appreciated love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Beautiful JayCee

Your words never fail to reach the heart-strings. Fabulous. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Xena

thank you for your kind words JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

loved

15 years 11 months ago

your poem is like

joan of arc at the stake but u live he dies what a contrast but now that ur a free bird a clean canvas can be cast and yes please do make it fast five stars are nothing for you you must have collected dozens by now and i can only wish glory to you as the one is not around.PROSE POETRY Joan of Arc at the stake but you live he dies what a contrast but now that you are a free bird a clean canvas can be cast and yes please do make it fast. Five stars are nothing for you, you must have collected dozens, and I can only wish glory to you as the one is not around and total freedom you've found.

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

The stars are pretty

lol but I dont really need them if you dont think I deserve them lol ;) big smile love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

greeneyes

15 years 11 months ago

Jayne

This beauty of this poem takes my breath away!

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Elizabeth

thank you for the kind comment hun I do appreciate it love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

sorry i'm late

i read this before aand could've sworn that i commented on it anyway - now it has all been said before me leaving me only three words to add oi oi oi love and hugs judd xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

OI OI OI … thanks heaps

OI OI OI ... thanks heaps hun ... I am sitting here its my daughters 17th birthday its 2.19am, I am having a bourbon and I am finishing her birthday poem shes gotten one every year since she was born, this year I am trying to outdo myself lol love and big hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

loved

15 years 11 months ago

17TH BIRTHDAY IS A RARE OCCASSION

Would you like to share is she a cancerian then i can well her compare to the world's greatest ones you know there was some loser guy i'd wished him to know i wonder whether you've read my poem for him so but let's not be so dim we'd rather share ur poem on the 17th b'day right in.

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

the birthday poem will be

the birthday poem will be posted today if you would like to read loved lol and i will look for yours in the morning love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

“Do what you must but

"Do what you must but never throw anyone out of your heart" Ram Dass. I guess that would include painting. Love the layers of paint on this canvas, dear. ~ would you consider: losing *but*, I grind from the leaves rather than "ground from between the leaves....etc.", as each lift of brush (omit *the*). The last paragraph... I am now a (rather than I am a now, oops) & "my brush is reaching out from the shadow of you" as the last line? "There is a kind of mysticism to writing." ~ Irvine Welsh

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

its not as some think and my

its not as some think and my heart holds the love whether he deserves it is another matter a long story that's sting hurts and is still fresh love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Nordic cloud

15 years 11 months ago

Not read the other comments yet, am late to this happening

Ann of Norway I love your idea of painting someone out wonderful, and the fervour with which one could do this could combine with the feelings and give it the atmosphere of a 'happening' quite a stunning one, if, for instance, one were to stage it, I can just imagine it taking place, in fact a whole play could be written using it as the instigator of it. Oh yo make me excited Jayne!!! Otherwise it is sad the reality of it, and with your hand shaking you dab and dab at the visage of the once loved person and it is, yes sad. "Little trees don't grow under big oaks" I think it was Rodin who said that when someone asked him to be an apprentice for a great painter, before he had developed much, this was his answer. It seemed to fit your poem too dear Jayne! Much love from Ann. Love this:- "shade, ground  from between the leaves  of midnight and dawn"

loved

15 years 11 months ago

the more i read u

that much more i admire you ur poetry its undoubtedly unique where do u write it under WHICH apple tree?? PLEASE DO CONFIDE IN ME I DON'T GET EMAIL FROM NEOPOET SO I HAVE TO VISIT U ALL rEPEATEDLY THIs is MY THIRD VIsIT TO URS AND I LOVE IT this lap tops S appears to be silent cafe coffee poetry