An Eyesong

nominated and bookmarked - nothing to crit love judy xxxx ps - 'and feel fullfilled,in his million dollar smile' - i'd lose the comma love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Five stars and a nomination from me. This poem is superb and the language usage is exquisite. My favorite lines are: Save a tear for those vacant ponds static in streamless emotions by gruesome sins wrought in the garb of religion Always, Cat

you really are a beautiful poet! this is work of total beauty! you make me smile! with much love shirley harrison

First class write. I've be AWOL for a few days so I missed this one. But I'm catching up now so...Brilliant. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

This is such an awesome write! Brilliant!

This poem is unique and very beautifully written. You write lovely poetry. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

Well done, Raj! Kudos for your poem! ~ "There is a kind of mysticism to writing." ~ Irvine Welsh

I also loved your poem but have one suggestion or two lol (from black and white keys of my piano) from the black and white keys on my piano from black and white keys on my piano from the black and white jeys of my piano dont know but that line was bothering me love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Raj, I was captured in this piece for a while and once I had read it and then re-read it again the image I had was this: you trying to create a moving piece of music using the 'sorrow and joy' keys of the piano, but you couldn't strike the right chord as to whether the music should be sad or happy. The last stanza answered which way the music went: My eyes sing in pleasure and pain Had you of opted for "my eyes sting"...then you would have moved the emotion back to sadness. The black and white keys also gave me an image of playing chess. Again with the black being the attacking force whilst the white played defensive. I may be well off the mark as to what this piece was about, but nonetheless, I enjoyed its structure and theme and it gave me a moment to dip into your world. kindest regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".