Selachian

I love Eddie! this is really powerful and straight to the point! The ending is brilliant! With much love shirley harrison

Eddy! That blew me away! Splinter-sharp teeth! You could have written script, for the adult-swim cartoon, the Maxx! You have to be a comic-book fan, or at least, of their art! Killer loves this kind of thing! Awesome job, ~ Gee

i would rate this as a blend of fire and ice...i found it very gripping from beginning right down to "scooping out of my spleen"... warmly...raj(sublime_ocean)

Wow, Cat, you even got me to cringe at that! I was gaffed from the beginning all the way to the end. Eddie hit a home run. I particularly liked that gruesome ending. ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Life is the sun, and the show must go on and on; make it come true. Life is the sun, and the road goes on and on; paint this song any colour but blue." - Don Ross

Love gone bad is so wonderfully portrayed in this stellar inking Cat. What amazing pictorial grandeur flecks this poem from the first to the last line! A poignant write but so well expressed. Thank You so very much for sharing Cat.

Cat So glad you told us what the title meant. Thank you for that. And I see the descriptives used here astounding to say the least. Edgewalker needs to come out and meet Eddy real soon. Have a blessed day today Love, Mona

Cat So glad you told us what the title meant. Thank you for that. And I see the descriptives used here astounding to say the least. Edgewalker needs to come out and meet Eddy real soon. Have a blessed day today Love, Mona

I am late brilliant write huni love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Powerful and gripping. Wonderful Cat Love Mand xxxxxxx

Especially this part: "that’s my beating heart lying on the tiles of the kitchen floor yet you smile as lie upon lie clings to your enticing lips breathlessly I kiss the deceit from that cool cherry-ripe mouth greedily gobbling your toxic candied kisses while you scoop out my spleen!" The beginning is great, then this part racks up the intensity, right until the grande finale! I just love crescendos. Whoever she is, she sounds like a nasty, nasty woman. Antoine

That Eddie sure can write Love lou xx

It's all been said before me, brilliant. There are some deadly fish in the world, but it's the ones that can live on dry land too that are the ones to be wary of eh Cat!!! Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Great as usual! Loved it.

Is any man worth one spleen? lol. As you know, I don't ordinarily do blood, guts and gore poetry unless it's a bit erotic. But I dig this one and will tuck away *selachian* for another day. ~ "There is a kind of mysticism to writing." ~ Irvine Welsh

hi there you have crafted another gem i first thought the opening four or five lines were the best till i read lines like " judas complex" and then i read what has to be some of the most chilling lines i have read for a while " serrated edges of promise broken shattered in the jaws of your decayed lying sharp as splinters teeth. wow wat a write simply awesome ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs x

Cat, thanks for putting the meaning at the bottom, I had no idea what it was or meant. If nothing else, I have learnt a new word today. This is exquisite. Every word, every line grabbed me and twisted me into Eddy's tainted and evil mind. You certainly got your brushes out today and slowly painted layer upon layer building this canvas into a masterpiece of imagery. Favourite lines: Serrated edges of promises broken shattered in the jaws of your decayed lying sharp-as-splinters teeth Cat, I loved this piece and it could be Mr Styx's best piece to date! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

although the last line left me thinking of Hannibal Lector lol. For me the only line that did not work so well was "carcinoma in the cockles". Carcinoma feels a bit too techical and it does not flow too well. Perhaps you could replace it with the more emotive, if older word, "canker". Cockles reminds me of the song "with cockles and mussels alive alive oh" and thus not quite as serious as you intend. Perhaps "beating" or "throbbing" or if you want to be more anatomical "tissues" or muscles". Just a thought anyway. Really enjoyed the poem. Love from sweet Keith