love shines

Hello and welcome here. I was just reading this and would like to give my feedback of it. This is a nice poem but needs some much needed work. Let me give you just a little example if I may since you ask for truth this first part: {When You look at me like that what do You see? I don’t understand have perfect You could want plain old me.} in learning to format and breaking your lines down how does this look When you look at me just like that what do you see I don't understand perfect (maybe a different word?) or how you would want plain old me Here is another little twist you may consider on this verse: [You love me now ans You’ll love me then If this is how love feels I don’t want it to end.] You love me now you'll love me then if this is how, true love feels I never want it to end That is just breaking down the lines. What I am trying to say is work on using less caps in the middle of your lines (actually no caps only the beginning of every other sentence) or not at all. That is a preference maybe. These are only my suggests. I will not go any further until I see how you like or do not like my twist on it. Just would like to lend a hand and I do think with some work and tweaking her up a bit will make it a great little poem for starters for the flow is good and the feeling is there. Just got to bring it around some more. I will be back and help if you like. You may either pm me or state your comment and I will reply back for sure. Welcome again Mona