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The Appetite Killer
The general alarm was sounded loud by Mother shouting high.
Someone left the door open and let in a bloody fly.
Everyone was expected to grab whatever they could
to chase the fly, to catch the fly and get rid of it for good.
Newspaper, swats, spray cans and tea-towels all after the flying invader.
The uninvited guest buzzed away attempting to land on our dinner.
With the paper firmly cast in a roll Dad made the table shake.
Didn’t get it square on, he said. But I reckon I gave it a headache.
My sister grabbed the can of spray and prepared the thing to douse
but Mother screamed No don’t do that you know it’ll drop its maggots!!!
Just leave the spray can over there, you’ll poison all our meal, Mum said.
And she chased it with the tea-towel, flicking it close to poor Dad’s head.
Hey hey take care with that, he said, as the insect flew away,
but Mum was determined it would be caught. Not to live another day.
She waved the tea towel about in the air, like a fanatic with a flag,
and chased the blowfly around the room. An outsider would‘a thought her quite mad.
It ducked around the waving cloth and headed back to the table,
making a beeline for the aromatic meat and the plate of steaming vegetable.
A dozen hands waved madly about. Six voices in unison
yelled at it to get away before our meal was carrion.
It slipped between the curtain and into the louvered window.
Quickly close the latch, we all heard Mother bellow.
Brother reached and flicked the handle of the louver-closing thing
and all throughout our meal that day we listened to it buzzing.
Critiques
Professor Purple
16 years ago
lol thanks for making me laugh!
judyanne
16 years ago
glad i was able to lighten your day
pleiades
16 years ago
the dreaded aussie
judyanne
16 years ago
yes, mostly christmas dinner
Candlewitch
16 years ago
Dear Judy
judyanne
16 years ago
annoying and disgusting cat
anonymous1
16 years ago
Love the ending...
judyanne
16 years ago
thanks lisa
shirley harrison
16 years ago
L:O:L
judyanne
16 years ago
much love back to you shirley harison
shirley harrison
16 years ago
i forgot to say
jetz
16 years ago
Hi Judy, Very witty
judyanne
16 years ago
or three or four eh
mand
16 years ago
Enjoyed your poem, a family
judyanne
16 years ago
it often felt like a war mand
Seren
16 years ago
I remember
judyanne
16 years ago
i can remember the first fly zapper i saw
Professor Purple
16 years ago
Even better when I read it out loud
judyanne
16 years ago
so glad you enjoy it antoine
anonymous1
16 years ago
Here...
judyanne
16 years ago
lol
Mari Shine
16 years ago
Your wonderful sense of wit
judyanne
16 years ago
Perfect scansion
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