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When Still Water's Rest

in the sweet-water
of the dreamtime,
I wade with slow
easy steps 

it is a waning light
of hope, that illuminates
a compendium in dreams
written as my heart
beats out the ink

from conception,
this story was confused
in death and life

And I hang
over the edge of tsunami
and I balance on pinewood,

the waters flow is stilled
but beats to the heart
of my dreams,
and the moons turn
forever lifts my head
and my spirit,
past the firmament

I am a child of darkness
cocooned in the light,
with the Kaleidoscope
of life and dreams
still writing,

until this pen
in the hand of my heart,
is silenced and at rest

— Seren, Jul 04, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Critiques

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Jayne-Chloe

I love the quiet grace of this piece. Absolutely beautiful. My favorite lines: the waters flow is stilled but beats to the heart of my dreams, and the moons turn forever lifts my head and my spirit, past the firmament I am a child of darkness cocooned in the light, with the Kaleidoscope of life and dreams still writing, Love it, Cat p.s. Thank you for this moment of peace and calm, I needed it!
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Cat

If this piece brought you calm ? that was its intent ... I wanted a little grace in my life so I decided to finish this one off ... just felt like I needed some myself love and biggest hugs JayCee x x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

a very beautiful and graceful write jc

i so love the beginning - 'the sweet-water of the dreamtime' ... sigh 'And I hang over the edge of tsunami and I balance on pinewood' - what else would you be doing at the edge of creation? love and hugs (even though you have the flu) judd xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Judd

Surfaced for a little while but I am going back to bed and watching old movies all day I feel like crap .. lol gotta love the dreaded lurgie ... NOT thanks for the lovely comment hun I appreciate it ... glad you liked those first lines they are some of my favourites in this piece as well love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
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shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest seren

"stunning" as ever! much love shirl.... shirley harrison
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Shirley

thanks for the comment I appreciate it I am happy you liked it love and hugs JayCee x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

reat

Uh oh!Lines 3and 4.Either wade with slow easy strides or swim with slow easy strokes.Otherwise a beautiful easily read work.your friend.....Stan
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Stan

I know there is a conundrum in those two lines but I wrote them to be exactly that way ... thanks for the comment and the read its appreciated I rather think I am going to leave this one as is(for the moment) ... maybe later I will feel differently its happened before and my poems are never finished or done with love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Jayne

I love it all love and big big hugs lou xx
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Lou

I am very happy you liked it hun big smile love and hugs JayCee P.s hope the feet are feeling better ;) (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Mand

You got it in one ... this is my peaceful place when i need to centre myself its the dreamtime I take my mind off too thanks for the lovely comment I appreciate it love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
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magics02

15 years 11 months ago

Left me a silence understood

Very nice piece I share the feelings in this one with you. It is hard to explain but I remain to my pen at hand and not to the woes of the world. Very good Serene. I hear it I feel it and I also see it. I bow. Worthy much worthy of a Nom also for sure. I have to bookmark this one as I find it resonates through me and in me this evening. Signed copy please? Good nite Aussie Lady Love Mona xoxoxo
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Mona

thanks for the lovely comment I am so sorry for the late replies the last two days have been insane (hugs) hope you and joey are well its my daughters seventeenth birthday today lol god i am starting to feel old love and big hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
M

magics02

15 years 11 months ago

A big Happy Birthday kiss to her from ME

Yes I had that for Joey in December and he will be 18 this year. Yikes I am getting older lol you have a great party and waiting to read her poems. Tell her for me and talk to you soon awesome aussie woman Love Mona xoxoxo
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Mona

What can I say ... I am missing her so much shes still two days away from being home ... and I have never been away from her this long lol I suck I know lol I will give her a kiss for you when she gets home I havent seen her since last friday lol ... I was just leaving a comment on your blog and I just found this comment dont know how I missed it ... blonde mofo moment lol love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

U RARELY READ ME.... PERHAPS ITS MY FAULT

Perhaps….. If i read all Ur poems twice over twice again, i shall for life as a neopoet remain and i shall learn the nuances of finesse poetry urs of course is the best,, you deserve accolades as much as i do chocolates perhaps some day when i learn what a metaphor is my heart shall burn fire it will emit and i ‘ll have to say oh shit is it???
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Loved

I was going to anwser these comments yesterday but the site crashed ... I will be round tomorrow having a read and i will be sure to catch up with something of yours :) love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Geezer

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

Hang time...

And I hang over the edge of tsunami and balance on a pinewood. Love and higgest bugs, ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Gee

Thanks for the comment big smile thanks love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Tam the Chanter

Tam the Chanter

15 years 10 months ago

waders

Lovely, calm, serene. Well written, but I have to agree with scribbler re the wading strokes.It occurs to me that you need cheering up-- so-- Through puddled sweet-water in Oz Walkabout in the Dreamtime becoz From the grave of Ned Kelly Found one old green welly So I paddle and piddle and splosh Get well soon Ian xx
Tam the Chanter

Tam the Chanter

15 years 10 months ago

terrific

I find something new in this piece each time I read it. It is a piece of art , I am unworthy to poke fun at. My sincere congratulations, it is magic. Ian xxx
Seren

Seren

15 years 10 months ago

You brought tears to my eyes

I see my poetry as another expression of my art ... thanks for that beautiful comment ... made a sad face smile love and hugs JayCee xxx (“To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.” ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson quote)
AW

Ayaz Warith

15 years 10 months ago

Lovely poem

Dear Seren, very calm flow. I loved its serenity and silence. Ayaz
Seren

Seren

15 years 10 months ago

Dear Ayaz

thanks for the read I really appreciated it and im very happy you liked it regards Jayne-Chloe
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ziggy

15 years 10 months ago

hi jayne

jayne this is beautiful needs nothing but to be read ,,,,,,,,zigs
Seren

Seren

15 years 10 months ago

Dear Ziggy

I hope you enjoyed the read my friend ive been writing to suit myself lately and I seem to have tapped into a calm easy flow ... thanks for the sweet comment I appreciate it love JayCee x x x (“To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.” ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson quote)
Seren

Seren

15 years 10 months ago

Dear KIng

Thanks for the sweet comment I appreciate it ... there is always more ;) love JayCee (“To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.” ~ Ralph Waldo Emerson quote)
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

15 years 10 months ago

Dear Seren

I have to agree with Cat -there is a certain peace and serenity about this piece that suggests a quiet aquiessence, a stillness that seeps off the page onto the reader. My favourite lines are int the quiet rounding off of the last stanza. Good work my friend! Boni