My Amber Across The Sea

Beautiful , so romantic, any woman would adore , to be loved that way. love lou xx

I'm an incurable romantic so this poem really pulled at my heart strings... Although I have been beaten up and battered And pretty much left for dead When I close my eyes She is a mermaid snuggled in my bed Now if nobody else love me Well that’s alright with me Because I know I have my love My Amber across the sea Those are my favorite lines but all of them are really good. Very lovely, indeed, Hobo! ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

I particularly like the way you express complex emotions so succintly. The sadness mixed with the trust, the powerful love. Wonderful. These images: "two ship wrecks Separated by the sea (...) She is a mermaid snuggled in my bed" are particularly touching. The ending concludes perfectly. Funny thing is, I used to not like "sailor poems" that much but thanks to you, I find that now they do, uh, float my boat. One possible modification: I wonder if it should be "10,000 miles from me" in the first stanza. Antoine

this one seems a little ragged but i love it so much that i've been unable to ignore the temptation to have a little play i hope you don't mind, but i've done a little edit on the first two verses - just me, i think the rhythm and wistfulness is improved with the repetative. As I sit on the sand and look out on the ocean and dream of my love ten thousand miles from me I can’t help but wonder, wonder if my Amber, I wonder if my Amber knows just what she does for me. i also think the longer lines draws out the melancholy while also assisting with the feel of comfort... just me as i say - couldn't resist as this new one of yours has so much feel to it love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

So very soft and wistful... beautifully written. My favorite lines: I have been lost forever And I think so has she We are two ship wrecks Separated by the sea Love those lines. Always, Cat

what an uplifting romantic poem ! with much love shirl.... shirley harrison

Hobo Just love this little ditty Oh how inside my head heart and soul you did intrude as for me and my love oceans apart ship wrecks in the night are we Both we are beaten and battered by life I am his Electric Blue mermaid and he is my Black Knight the one who owns my heart and soul Like you I have my black knight who I know loves me Electric Blue