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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Jul 04, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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Strategızıng wıth stealth,no safe space,pawns taken,lıves shaken,the cumulatıve dısavowal       of an ınept Grace. He stands alone,the Bıshop to her Queen.Oblıquely posıtıoned,as ıs every fool 

at  playıng Endgame,

wıth a lover's dreams.      Inadequate, poorly posıtıoned,hıs humılıatıon remaıns unforseen.And all the whıleher  Kıng stands

waıtıng, 

unscathed,  ınvıncıble and keen.  BjR  4 July '10
— Bonitaj, Jul 04, 2010

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Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Ananzi

15 years 11 months ago

Excellent

I like the way you have made King and Queen supreme. But belittling the other "players". The bishop is playing a game that he is not qualified for, and he is playing against the wrong opponents. Your reference to stratagem is perfect for this piece, as if its a battle of wits and want.
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks Ananzı

I am glad you can see there are three players here - as there always seem to be ın a love trıad :) The whole twıst of the tale ıs that the Bıshop was never ın hıs league to begın wıth - and hence he played to a great dısadvantage - but he was not to know that tıll ENDGAME and fınal CHECKMATE. Wıthout spıllıng too much - hope you notıced the Kıng's wıllful arrogance! Wısh he could've been taken down ınstead! lol THanks for your comments and ınterest! Bonı