Why Daddy Misbehaved

I went down to the graveyard
just to see my daddy's grave.
I went down to the graveyard
just to see my daddy's grave.
They say it was the whiskey
made my poor daddy misbehave.

Momma used to hollar,
'Don't you go sneakin' out the house.'
Momma used to hollar,
'Don't you go sneakin' out the house.'
But daddy he was quiet, yes
He was quiet as a mouse.

Momma said, 'He's better dead.
You know he never learned to live,
Momma said, 'He's better dead.
You know he never learned to live,
He was just a low-down daddy
getting good at telling fibs'.

— faithmairee, Jul 04, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Florida, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Lawrence Ferlinghetti, Edna St. Vincent Millay, Lucille Clifton and Elizabeth Bishop

Critiques

judyanne

16 years ago

great so far faith

but to me this is just the beginning - it would really work well if you added to it with thoughts of the author in regards to how he/she feels, not just what Momma says.... just me - i think it has huge potenial for a powerful emotive write love to you judy xxxx ehttp://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

xena465

16 years ago

Great one Faith

I don't think I've seen this kind of form before. But I sure love it. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You, Xena

This is a blues song lyrics. I'm glad you like it. I have written some more of these which I might post in the future. Thank you as always for your wonderful feedback. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

Professor Purple

16 years ago

A great one!

Too bad I can't hear the music with it. Like Judyanne, I think it could be expanded when I look at it on screen. Of course, musically it may be different, you can always repeat your favourite stanza, make it a chorus, or throw in a guitar solo. Maybe the first stanza could be the chorus, and it could go chorus-verse-chorus-verse-chorus. Antoine

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You, Antoine

Thanks for stopping by and especially for all of your wonderful feedback. Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

scribbler

16 years ago

daddy

Only suggestions I could make would change it into a "western classic"so I'll keep mouth shut and say bravo..........scribbler

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You

For suggesting that...I changed it. ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

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