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Poetree
Jul 02, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Alone

I look out the window and the weather looks grim,It's like a glimpse of the future without him,The trees they cry with the wet of the rainAnd my heart dies with the thought of the painJust the thought of being alone
— Poetree, Jul 02, 2010

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shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Joel.........

very strong poem i love it! However it would be really fab if the 2 last lines Just the thought alone of being alone, had some changes Having said that i am no expert, and am going off for the weekend, i know i'm the first to comment so wait for ideas from the others, I hope you dont mind me saying, i love your poetry and will look in again when i return! for example read it with out the first alone, "just the thought of being alone" any way will look back on monday with much love joel! shirl.... shirley harrison
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Poetree

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks Shirley

You're totally right, going to change it, thank you!!! Have a lovely weekend, look forward to talking to you soon, much love x x x
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shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Joel

beautiful, and i feel exactly like that sometimes in my life! with much love and respect shirl..... shirley harrison