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paul
paul
Jul 02, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

This Round Is On Me

 Verses filled with potency Overflowing from my penInto a decaying heart Rage fills the empty glassTo the very top As I drink another sip Of bitter melancholy  On vacant roof tops I listen to my heart speak Of a hope that spilledinto a deep ocean  That slowly evaporates  Intertwined in a mind thatHas thoughts speeding On boulevards filled with Constant self doubt   Sick of the pity offered Tired of the trampled confidenceSlowly dying to the sound Of sweet nothings   The gates of paradise Are not ready for me I gain an inner strength As I realize what I left for grabs This time I will give Life a tasteOf its own poison  
— paul, Jul 02, 2010

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raj

16 years ago

Hello Paul

melancholy so wonderfully expressed in this write...while the lines vent the feelings the lament is sensed between them...great choice of words to create the mood and a good choice of using the medium of poetry to steam out emotions... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)...
themoonman

themoonman

16 years ago

Damn Paul...

This is really a very good poem, the only suggestion I could make at all would be possibly removing a couple of "a's" and "that's", but that's all... very good, loved the ending verse. Richard
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years ago

Wow, Paul. So dark and sad

Wow, Paul. So dark and sad almost, very interesting take. I shall have to read this again before I venture a suggestion, great read. Julie D.D. Hello all, come and join us in Live chat! Meet n' greet, Neo night, lonely poems, teen night. We have something for everyone, come and meet your community!
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frangipangi

16 years ago

I love it!

Paul, frustrated by life's rough and tumble, you re-group, square your shoulders, take a deep breath and give life a kick-in-ass AGAIN! Great write Paul. Love Always, Frangi

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