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Unconscious Love
when my mind is adrift
and lights have gone out,
will you take up my hand
lifting it to your mouth
can you hold me close
so no air will get in,
shall we become one
or would that be a sin
will I whisper to you
on the tip of my tongue,
as my touch is a Mime
that lingers and hums
could I slip off your shirt
brushing lips on your chest,
will you shiver with pleasure
as I give you the best
would you unbuckle my belt
and slide me out of my mind,
will my eye brush a filament
as this mystery divined
will a rapture enfold me
holding me in the arms,
of the man of my dreams
in a smile he shall charm
can the love of my dreams
come true in my time?
or will he only exist
in the lines of my rhyme
the only answer lies buried
at the bottom of a heart,
and it never can tell you
this love is laying apart
Critiques
CyberSpace
16 years ago
woman he better just be a
Seren
16 years ago
hmmmm I might just be
xena465
16 years ago
Ooooooh Snake!!!
Seren
16 years ago
LOL Xena
xena465
16 years ago
I know
Seren
16 years ago
Awwwwww huni … we have to
rogerramjet365
16 years ago
You
Candlewitch
16 years ago
Dear Jayne
Seren
16 years ago
Dearest Cat
raj
16 years ago
Gosh JayCee!!
Seren
16 years ago
Dear Raj
raj
16 years ago
well! well! well! JayCee
scribbler
16 years ago
love
Seren
16 years ago
Dear Stan
judyanne
16 years ago
beautiful
Seren
16 years ago
Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeell lol .... Cat Did it
Candlewitch
16 years ago
LOL!
Seren
16 years ago
I am telling you Cat I am
judyanne
16 years ago
a week's worth of a nasty head cold
rogerramjet365
16 years ago
Love It
Seren
16 years ago
Dear Roger
shirley harrison
16 years ago
Just beautiful!
Seren
16 years ago
Dear Shirley
Electric Blue
16 years ago
unconscious Love
R.M.Shanmugam
16 years ago
so enthralled was i when i
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