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The Just

...And twinned by soul lake
The ground was ice beneath her buttocks

He saw flowers in the stone
With carnivore heads
Figures and beasts in the cracks
In lonely strand wall

The terrible sound of night
Was the beating heart of a woman
Yearning chains over ankle and brain

Statues walked free of thought

And light spriralled beneath his gaze
Glass shattered from a stray thought
Stirred from the bowel depths of his hell
The mind  split in two in contention
with itself

Angels stepped free from the Paradise island

Devils draped in hermaphrodite danced

Words syrupped from the lips of a woman
he no longer knew
Oil weeped from the ears
Myrrh from the mouths of Babel's children
Fire in the eyes of strangers
Thorns in the breast, in the heart

She crept free from a spot
By the shoreline where he'd plotted
his own death
Mounted the skies to his bed
Melting ice through his window
Drunk with the blood of his thoughts
Draping her breasts
Flesh her flame
And with her, Death, came
The silent awakening...

In a dream a misted isle
A low valley, a temple in ruins
And a woman oil black head to toe
The soul for so long in waiting
To take him inside

The light filled his room
A bird singing
Slow shifting wing
Wallowing love in her throat

For a moment it was as though the wind had ceased to swirl
The body above the mattress like ice and eyes never to open
again...
















































— Dalton, Jul 02, 2010

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About the Author

Country/Region: The Celestial River

Favorite Poets: Shane MacGowan, Dylan Thomas, Qays ibn Al-Mulawwah, Wallada bint al-Mustakfi, Rumi, Khalil Gibran, Yona Wallach, Arthur Rimbaud, Paul Eluard, Brendan Behan, James Clarence Mangan, William Blake, Tom Waits, Charles Bukowski, Forough Farrokhzad, Thomas Chatterton

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raskin

15 years 11 months ago

Very good imagery, like a

Very good imagery, like a dream. Some distrubing some not, you held my interest and I would like to read more to understand. raskin
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear John

i could go on for hours about this poem but i have picked one particular piece that I liked …And twinned by soul lake The ground was ice beneath her buttocks He saw flowers in the stone With carnivore heads Figures and beasts in the cracks In lonely strand wall The terrible sound of night Was the beating heart of a woman Yearning chains over ankle and brain these three stanza's made me think of a tombstone of a long departed woman ... yearning ....I know its probably far from your meaning but I have taken my own from this poem bravo love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
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Dalton

15 years 11 months ago

Thankyou Seren

Thankyou, I am as much interested in the interpretation others put to my words as to myown personal interpretation. john (Quote - If God Lived On Earth People Would Break His Windows)
Kailashana

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

You master these stories

You master these stories with imagery and the sound of bells. (It seems whenever I read you poems, church bells ring ;-) ) ~A p.s did you mean sprawled rather than spralled? The whole modern world has divided itself into Conservatives and Progressives. The business of Progressives is to go on making mistakes. The business of the Conservatives is to prevent the mistakes from being corrected. G.K. Chesteron
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shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

very deep poetry!

Dear Dalton i see its untitled "spirit and Soul" i think would make this poem even more amazing but thats just a thought from me! much love shirley harrison
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Dalton

15 years 11 months ago

thankyou all for your kind

thankyou all for your kind comments, that word was supposed to be "spiralled". I composed this one a long time ago, I was a different person, and a bit troubled. I'm not the man I was then, thank God. I'm a little out of my comfort zone here. Sometimes I pull it off, sometimes I lose it completely, sometimes both things happen at the same time, if that means anything. john
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shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Dear John

that means that you are a true poet! shirley harrison
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

awesome write dalton

the more i read it the more i get from it i feel the whole work revolves around the two lines = 'And with her, Death, came The silent awakening'… bookmarked for further study... love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
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amalzamani

15 years 11 months ago

Is She

The Angel of Death?
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Dalton

15 years 11 months ago

Sorry no I wasn’t thinking of Azrail

Sorry no I wasn't thinking of Azrail when I wrote this one, the oil black woman mentioned in the dream sequence at the end of the poem I was thinking was the soul of the man, however it is also open to interpretation, if that's what you see, then that is what it is. thanks for stopping by.
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amalzamani

15 years 11 months ago

Izra'eel

from where did you learn about Izra'eel? by the way the name Izra'eel is not mentioned in the Quran...Allah always refers to him as the Angel of Death. However, the name Izra'eel is used by the public...not sure of its origin though. not really, I did not see it as the Angel of Death. I was a bit confused, so I asked. I'll re read it to see how it fits as his soul. thanks
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Dalton

15 years 11 months ago

I was thinking only the last

I was thinking only the last part, in the dream sequence, that mentions the oil-black woman as his soul. I don't really know what I was thinking of at the time, or if it really even means anything at all. As I say I wrote it a long time ago. Thanks for your interest Amalzamani, love john
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Mari Shine

15 years 11 months ago

This is an amazing

This is an amazing metaphoric write John. You have penned the write superbly and filled it with a fine display of pictorial depiction. I found myself catching my breath, as I read through your stunning lines. Another very finely honed and crafted poetic gem John. Thank You so very much for sharing.
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Dalton

15 years 11 months ago

thankyou

You are very kind, thank you for your generous words Mari