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lou
lou
Jul 01, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Escape

His hands grasped her jugular
and left her life suspended
the shape of his fingers
embedded in her neck

So escape was executed
cloaked by pitch black night
with nerves overwhelming

 Self esteem ,drowning
in her terror

Heart firmly in her mouth
she fled to the safety
a hostel, now her home


PART 2 OF TRILOGY


— lou, Jul 01, 2010

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Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

wow

this is Fantastic lou, you have written a brilliant piece here "wonderful" shirley harrison
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Shirley

thanks much love lou xx
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Lou

I just caught this on the way to bed ... brava hun its a great piece love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Jayne

Thank you love lou xx
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

escape

suspense builds.awaiting part 3.line 8 seems distended not quite right word?......scribbler
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Ok

I'll look at that , thanks. Lou xx
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

after reading this

.now i know why u only give me a fourer you deserve a sixer but all i am allowed to purse out is a fiver
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

loved

im just stingy with my 5s i'll to be better lol thanks love lou xx