Seren

Jul 01, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

To The Dream-Catchers ....

dip into the Dreamtime
there is nothing to fear,
hang up your troubles
on star's hanging near

as your slipping down
farther into the night,
dreams will creep out
and give you a fright

a dusting of the sparkles
that wane from the sky,
and a glitter of dreams
now fall from your eyes

catch a handful of a wisp
floating out from a cloud,
hold on for a journey
that will leave you wowed

dust off your dream-catcher
and cast out the net,
never knowing what gems
and messages you'll get

but hold onto your dreams
and fly to the stars,
but remember to wake up
or it will carry you too far

~~~~

the surface of nightmares
I've drowned in time,
is a fear that I carry
and a fight that I mime

— Seren, Jul 01, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

shirley harrison

16 years ago

"wow"

you did me proud, i loved your description of dusting How wonerful you are Seren! your very Brilliant! maybe tomorrow i will have my own version....L:O:L much love you dreamy poetess! shirley harison

Seren

16 years ago

Awww I could have gone a lot further with this one but i did it for a bit of fun for you and Elizabeth lol so happy you liked it though thanks heaps love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

shirley harrison

16 years ago

absolutely love it

you are a diamond, i listened to your voice today in one of your poems I'm slowly learning how to find everything ! beautiful auzzie, i knew your voice before i heard it! shirley harrison

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Shirley

LOL I only have one spoken word poem here so I know which one you mean thanks so much ... thanks for the comment I really appreciate it love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

xena465

16 years ago

Beautiful JayCee

I could do with catching a few dreams myself, but this fabulous write gives me something to dream about...just so lovely. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Xena

Im about five minutes off hooking my balloon to a star lol ... thanks for the lovely comment ... this one was inspired by a conversation last night on green eyes latest piece lol love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

judyanne

16 years ago

hi jc

lovely write, but really not one of your best (not one of your best still meaning really great write.) 'as your slipping down farther into the night, dreams will creep out and give you a fright' is mixed a little in tense i prefer - 'as you slip down farther into the night, dreams will creep out and give you a fright' and the last verse especially seems contrived simply to rhyme something more like (just a quick thought - happy to work on something more appropriate if you like) - 'I’ve drowned in time on the surface of nightmares it is a fear that I carry but i fight what scares' love and hugs can't be perfect everytime oi oi oi judd xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Judd

None of my poems are perfect and are never finished but if you ever have suggestions leave them if you want, before I edit I always go through every comment and see what suggestions have been offered and use what I find relevent I love your suggestions the only one I cant use is the one for the last stanza it changes the meaning I was aiming for and thats one verse I dont plan to change its separate because its sorta lol yeah hard to explain here thanks for the time and the suggestions I am going to use bits of your other suggestions love and big hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

lou

16 years ago

Aboriginal Dream Time ?

Sorry if this comment isn't workshop enough for people . but you poem is perfect. lou xx

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Lou

Huni if you dont have anything to add you just leave a comment thats what I do lol and I usually say nothing to crit or nothing to change cant be more honest than that ... this was inspired but shirley and green eyes lol was a little whim for them I ahvent worked on it much yet lol thanks heaps love JayCee x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Electric Blue

16 years ago

Dream Catcher

Jay-cee Wonderful - I have dream catchers in every window and within I have put beautiful crystals so when i wake in the morning rainbows fill my room and at night the rainbows just change colour. Dreams are all i have and hold onto my friend just slippin and slidin through the day and the night dreams to hold onto oh what a delight. just wonderful Electric Blue

Seren

16 years ago

Heya Magz

How are you ? Just got your message sorry I didnt reply earlier will get round to it in the next couple of hours had a day off and have to play catch up sounds like you sleep in a kaleidscope of light Magz ... I like the sound of that :) will send you an email before I log out today ok hun love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

greeneyes

16 years ago

perfection

Wow, just caught this one. It is beautiful. Greeneyes

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Elizabeth

Dear Elizabeth ..................... so glad you liked this one ... since you and Shirley inspired it lol love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

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