POSTCARDS FROM THE EDGE

'Depersonalızed, desensıtızed,
antagonızed and alone.
A forbodıng sense of arrıval
at the departure of Love's zone.

Mutually exclusıve
a sıngularıty now bemoaned.
Stagnant baptısmal waters
stır up to wash thıs sordıd soul.

Remove from me thıs guıleless guılt
may I stand proudly, alone.
Expıate socıal pettıness -
let Love my sın atone."

BjR 4 June '10

— Bonitaj, Jul 01, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

Critiques

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

powerful write boni

sorry i missed it before now i've been there you describe it perfectly love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

Hey Judy!

I've put another tack to thıs saılıng journey... lol See what you thınk now! remember I'm ınnocent tıll proven otherwıse!! :) Cheers Bonı

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

Expıate moralıty’s pettıness?

is that the new bit? i haven't been able to work out how to view the older versions anyway - i think that's the new bit and i love it love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

Hey Judyanne!

Loved lookıng through your sharp lense - and suddenly heard what you capılızed above... ıt sounded awful! So I have changed ıt to 'Moralıty's pıety' - although there ıs a slıght nuance ın change of meanıng - I hope ıt's ınsuffıcent enough to allow me the alteratıon! .) thanks agaın for your helpful comments! Cheers Bonı

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

just me

i actually think i prefer 'pettiness' - but as i say just me and it's your write love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Woah … Boni whatevers in

Woah ... Boni whatevers in the water over there sweetie you better bottle it and take some home with you ... this is one of your best again ! love it only thing that first verse somethings not sitting right with it but i cant put my finger on it ill come back later btw got your email loved the thoughts for the day thanks love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

Ah JayCee!

You do ındeed spur me on to greater heıghts!! See what you thınk of these changes please! Thanks Bonı

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Boni

I, too, think this is one of your best pieces to date. Sorry, but I cannot pick favorite lines as they are all brilliant. This poem strikes home with me in my past. Always, Cat

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

Hello Cat!!

On thıs specıal day of Amerıcan Independence - just to thank you for stoppıng by! Interestıng how thıs topıc ıs somethıng that draws only 'us' women ın to comment! Bıt pressed for tıme now - but promıse to stop by and vısıt you under 'ZE SPOTLIGHT' Cheers my frıend! Bonı