i count the minutes

I count the minutes
as they tick by
one at a time
I am lonesome
for you, my darling
whose life is over
never will I gaze
into your eyes
nor see your smile
no, not again

How shall I go on
will my pain cease
my heart beats slowly
the hours seem long
you would want me
smiling as in life
remembering
all the good times
darling, you know
they were such good times

— faithmairee, Jun 29, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Florida, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Lawrence Ferlinghetti, Edna St. Vincent Millay, Lucille Clifton and Elizabeth Bishop

Critiques

xena465

16 years ago

A good one Faith

It's sad when a relationship ends, but the hurt contiunes. Well written. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank you, Xena

Thank you so much for reading and commenting on my poem. I appreciate your feedback. Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

scribbler

16 years ago

count

I thought lover had died.Touching memorial.Hope not based on real life.....scribbler

greeneyes

16 years ago

just beautiful

magics02

16 years ago

Great Faith

How you describe your heart felt feelings in this write and smile you shall. We all come to know these feelings sometime or other in our lives. Good write, great title, theme is of caring and heartfelt, one from your very being which makes it yours and yours alone. Bella ciao Mona xoxoxo

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thanks So Much

Thank you all for your wonderful remarks. I appreciate them more than you know. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

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