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SAVANNAH RIVER

I used to run so wild and free
   from Blue Ridge mountains to the sea
   my ebb and flow were governed not
   by any structure man had wrought

Summer time uncovered muds
   deposited by past Spring's floods
   if you dared to build too close
   I'd wash you 'way when waters rose

Current varied, fast or still
   determined mostly by my will
   and ,of course,by the terrain
   or by amount of falling rain

I held 'bout every kind of fish
   that could be served up on a dish
   from trout up near my mountain source
   to flounder at end of my course

Who'd have thought my depth and span
   could be contained by works of man?
   but now by earth and concrete mass
   my final taming's come to pass

Now I only can run wild
   with the leave of Adam's child
   my rapids which once roared like thunder
   now silenced by the lakes they're under

Water calmer than it was before
   and I've miles and miles more shore
   more people come to visit yearly
   an occurance I approve of dearly

And during recent six year drought
   when I'd have been almost dried out
   engineers maintained my flow
   the dams allowed it to be so

Sometimes I miss my wilder life
   filled with uncertainty and strife
   but like an old man now grown fat
   I'm satisfied with where I'm at
— scribbler, Jun 29, 2010

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About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Stan

Another super write. Well done. I wonder if you meant in this line... if you dared to build too {cloe} .......[close] Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

savannah

thanks Zena for read and spotting typo.You know I actually DO preview before submitting lol...........scribbler
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

wonderful scribbble scribbler

love it the taming of savannah (suggestion for title??) judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

Hmmm....

That may well have been a better title, but for some reason I like to keep my titles short(almost titled it just Savannah)but I do appreciate your suggestion and kind comment......scribbler
S

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

savannah

Good to hear from you and thanks......scribbler
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 11 months ago

I liked this one

Another good write Scribbler, great flow and theme. Sincerely, Lil Z
SH

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Stan the Man

love your style and this River has spoken, i wouldnt mind to see it now, lovely as ever much love shirley harrison
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

river

You mean I have a style?!?lol.Still has wild spots between dams.thanks for dropping by...Stan
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Stan

I have a friend who lives near a river by the same name lol wonder if you passed them loved your poetry your rhythm and rhyme is deeevine lol love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

river

If friend's river forms border between South Carolina and Georgia we may well have.Appreciate visit and kind words.....Stan
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poewriter58

15 years 11 months ago

Stan

Instead of stiller why not use calmer or would that change your original meaning I love the rhyme in this piece the entire poem is excellent. Your work is outstanding and your subject matter always a delight to read Chrys
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

change

Great suggestion and done.Over used still.Thanks for kind words and read.....scribbler
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Scribbler

You have a style that is all your own and you can tell a story so that it grips the reader and carries her/him along. My favorite lines: Who’d have thought my depth and span could be contained by works of man? but now by earth and concrete mass my final taming’s come to pass Always, Cat
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

style

Susan says my "style "leaves much to be desired,OH!you mean in poetry lol.Thanks for your kind comment
mand

mand

15 years 11 months ago

One thing that will never

One thing that will never change is that things are always changing. Not sure if I understood me own statement there! Glad your "satisfied where your at". I haven't got to that stage yet, I think I've got ants in me pants, looking forward to getting there though. Great poem loved it. Love Mand xxxxx
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

fat

River and I both old and fat,only river is satisfied lol.Sometimes change is for better.thanks for read and comment......scribbler