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Lonnie
Jun 29, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Hobbit Hike

                        Hobbit  Hike




                Tendrils of thistledown drift with the breeze
                snow on a mid-summers day
                insects are buzzing beneath ancient trees
                as if they had something to say

                A stream murmurs softly as it flows along
                wending its way to the sea
                in tune with the birds that are singing a song
                about how it feels flying free

                The road that I travel is longer and older
                than any I've wandered before
                and lends my feet strength to be daring and bolder
                in straying so far from my door

                Morning fades slowly to late afternoon
                shadows play tag with the sun
                evening will come with its gold-colored moon
                proclaiming that daytime is done

                Then will I lie by the side of the road
                thoughts to myself I will keep
                listening calmly to cricket and toad
                singing me softly to sleep


               C.  Lon  R.  Bruso

               

               
— Lonnie, Jun 29, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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Critiques

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lyz

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Lonnie

Title got to me and I had to read and I am pleased I have. I want to be a hobbit, lol. This is wonderful and I can say I found nothing to crit about. You have gotten my imagination out of bed this morn. My oh my, such a dreamy hike. Thanks and love to you and yours. XX
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, lyz!

Grab your walking stick and come along! The weather's fine and we might see Elves or Ents! LOL!!! So glad you enjoyed this, lyz!
greeneyes

greeneyes

15 years 11 months ago

OMG

WOW! I loved this magicial poem! Just beautiful. I love hobbits! Elizabeth
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, Elizabeth!

I figured I couldn't piss anybody off with this one! LOL!! Anyways, I appreciate you stopping by to read and comment, and I'm happy you liked this piece!
greeneyes

greeneyes

15 years 11 months ago

LOL! AH YOU NEVER KNOW

LOL! AH YOU NEVER KNOW ,Lonnie, there could be a huge group of Hobbit haters out there who think hikes should be banned!
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poewriter58

15 years 11 months ago

Lon

I agree with Liz nothing here to add, subtract,change or suggestion If a spouse were permitted to nominate for spotlight I would I love this poem , you can't help but smile when reading it. See Lyz wants to be a hbbit now lol love ya Me
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, Dearest!

We should all be Hobbits for a while and see if it will improve our Humanity at all! Your opinion on my work is always something I cherish, and I'm glad this one made you smile!
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magics02

15 years 11 months ago

Love the Hobbit poem

Very well written Lonnie. I am enjoying all your writes and what an effect your poems produce now it is amazing. I see great improvement as you continue your writes sir. I have to share this one too as I love the little Hobbits and Knomes friends. Kudos to you Mona
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Mona!

I guess everybody likes the 'Little Folk'! This one just kinda popped into my head today so I figured I'd better write it down! Thanks for reading and commenting!
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Lonnie

Ah to be a care free Hobbit, I wouldn't change a thing about the poem. lou xx
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks lou!

I greatly appreciate your coming by to read and comment! Feedback is what every poet desperately needs, thanks again!
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 11 months ago

Speechless

Time and time again your work amazes me. This time I nominate it! Sincerely, Lil Z
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Lil Z!

Your kind words are most welcome and I am pleased you thought the poem worthy of nomination! Thank you, sincerely!
Kailashana

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

“In a hole in the ground

"In a hole in the ground there lived a hobbit. Not a nasty, dirty, wet hole, filled with the ends of worms and an oozy smell, nor yet a dry, bare, sandy hole with nothing in it to sit down on or to eat: it was a hobbit-hole, and that means comfort." From comfort (mother's womb/universal benevolence) emerges our hero's journey, our walkabout in dreamtime. Gotta hug you for this one ((((((Lonnie)))))). ~A The whole modern world has divided itself into Conservatives and Progressives. The business of Progressives is to go on making mistakes. The business of the Conservatives is to prevent the mistakes from being corrected. G.K. Chesteron
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Anna!

Maybe this one will make my detractors forget that I'm a 'nasty-old-white-man'! LOL!! I appreciate the comments and the hug!
Kailashana

Kailashana

15 years 11 months ago

I suppose having supporters

I suppose having supporters will engender its opposite: detractors. Hmmmm. But when we know each other's hearts.... well it IS good, isn't it, Lonnie? And things take on a different meaning, it would seem. ~ The whole modern world has divided itself into Conservatives and Progressives. The business of Progressives is to go on making mistakes. The business of the Conservatives is to prevent the mistakes from being corrected. G.K. Chesteron
Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

15 years 11 months ago

Well done,

Lonnie, keep them coming their brilliant. Congratulations again. Regards Roscoe..
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Roscoe!

This one was a fun write, and a definite change-up from the theme of my last post! I'm pleased that you enjoyed it!
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shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Hobbit Hike

Dear Lonnie wonderful poetry, i hike and my feet always end up looking like a hobbits! love the title and i have to say that i loved every verse Delightful and i had a real sense of peace at the end! when i next go up a mountain on a hike i will remember this much love shirley harrison
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, Shirley!

Always remember to take along a good walking stick and an extra snack or two! It's a pleasure to get nice comments from a lovely Lady!
faithmairee

faithmairee

15 years 11 months ago

Excellent Poem

A true delight to read. Excellent writing, Lonnie. ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, Faithmairee!

I'm glad you liked my little offering, and I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment! Thanks again!
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Mand!

I felt the need for something a little more on the whimsical side, so hence, this poem! Glad you approve!
Professor Purple

Professor Purple

15 years 11 months ago

Absolutely wonderful!

An instant nomination. Hard to choose a favourite stanza, but it's either the first or the last one, which to me are always the most important anyway. Antoine
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Antoine!

You honor me with your kind comments! I appreciate the nomination, but even more, the fact that you took the time to read and comment! See you in Chat!
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Seabhac!

I'm happy that you enjoyed this little poem and thankful that you took the time to come by and leave a nice comment!
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Lonnie

Wistful and with a lovely smooth flow sorry nothing to crit I bow relaxing to read love JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, Jaycee!

It's always a pleasure hearing from you and getting your input on something I have written! Thanks for the kind sentiments!
Tonya

Tonya

15 years 11 months ago

Story type poems have

to be one of my favorite kinds to read! Though a short travel here. I love the descriptive lines. ‘…thistledown drift with the breeze…snow on a mid-summers day.. Insects buzzing…as if they had something to say’ ‘Morning fades slowly to late afternoon Shadows play tag with the sun’ ‘listening calmly to cricket and toad Singing me softly to sleep’ My favorites..wait, that’s almost the whole poem! Lovely, Lonnie, and again, your rhyme and rhythm Are impeccable and so smoothly done! Always, Tonya
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, Tonya!

You make me feel all warm and fuzzy, like a Hobbit! LOL!! Hey, seriously, I do thank you for stopping by to read and leave such a nice comment!
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

i love this lonnie

it reads so gently and smoothly just two lines tripped me up 'A stream murmurs softly as it flows along wending its way to the sea' i wonder what you think of the flow rather as 'A stream murmurs softly flowing along as it wends its way to the sea' ?? love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, Judy!

This one was a pure pleasure to write, and I'm very pleased that you enjoyed it enough to leave a nice comment!
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Lonnie

I very much like your title, as usual, and I find the theme to be magical. I wish I could write in rhyme like you do. I think you are brilliant! Always, Cat
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Cat!

As always, I greatly look forward to your comments and opinions about anything that I create! If I can please you, I can say I've accomplished something!
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

hobbit

Hey Frodo,I take exception to your implication that all hobbits are bums!(just kidding)very easily read journey.Line 11 seems a bit long but I have no clue to shortening it without losing meaning........scribbler
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks scibbler!

Actually, I'm probably more Bilbo's age! LOL!! At any rate, thanks so much for reading this and commenting!
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raj

15 years 11 months ago

Hi Lonnie

so much has already been said about this lilting write of yours much of which is what i would have said...in a nutshell i wish to say .."its easy to make out that you were one with nature and nature was one with you"... lovely write...the words float on the wings of a breeze here..the nomination and the stars are just a token ... warmly..raj (sublime_ocean)
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you, raj!

Any and all feedback is always greatly welcomed, and it pleases me that this particular piece has seemed to please so many, including yourself! Thanks again for your kind words!
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frangipangi

15 years 11 months ago

simply beautiful Lonnie

Hobbit Hike is classic lyrical and beautifully written. Lilting and lighthearted but deliberately crystal clear, I see the thistledown, I hear the insects and crickets and toads, and I now I sleep! Thank you Lonnie, you deserve spotlight. Love, Frangi
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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Frangi !

Glad you enjoyed this one and thank you for stopping by to read and leave such a nice comment!
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

15 years 11 months ago

Hobbit Like

Lonnie Oh what a wonderful delight This took me back to my gentle stream - My poem - Down By the riverside. I lost Mama at Easter and still dealing with my late husbands death too. But after Mama Passed she lay in her coffin of the palest blue waiting to be moved to the top of the mountain over looking her home down in the valley below On the porch we would sit endlessly days and night full of stars Where we would walk in the evening fields to talk late into the night the stars sparkle in a blue velvet sky above the ink black mountains which I still walk day and night in North Carolina. Paradise here on earth I walked through the woods down to the riverside and sat on a lone fallen tree where the river sang softley - quietly to me The gentle breeze sang whispering gently in the tree tops above it was just mama and me she kissed my cheek - gently The river just flowed by timelessly How long I sat alone I know not but my special time was reminded by your wonderful poem above where I would wonder and rest for eternity. Me little hobbit Always my dear friend Electric Blue