Seren

Jun 29, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Thin Read of Sound

I had become the slender reed
that bent to curve but never broke

a hollow echo of time
that thrilled my veins
(and now haunts my eyes)
and was sung,
as roots of knowledge dug deep,
but with a finding of ground
they eased closer to my heart

with limbs of grace
and foreign hands
I had wandered,
the face of the earth

but I return
to bend ever lower
in giving thanks,
for I am a hollow reed
now streaming on the sound
of a whole world,

still singing its own song
in an a cappella of time

— Seren, Jun 29, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

temidayo

15 years 11 months ago

wow you blew me away

it reminds me of how we feel when we believe we have life bad but when we wander elsewhere we find out our strains is bliss compared to what another faces

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks so much for the comment ... your right on with your read ... we think we have it bad but then look around and our lot doesnt seem so bad eh ?? dont think we have met before so welcome to Neopoet kind regards Jayne-Chloe (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Jayne

Fantastic. Well thought out and presented with skillful language usage. (might want to check the title for typo)Favorite lines: but I return to bend ever lower in giving thanks, for I am a hollow reed now streaming on the sound of a whole world, still singing its own song in an a cappella of time Love Cat

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Cat

I was using a play on words a thin READ of time ;) was waiting to see if someone picks up the other meaning to that lol there is one thanks for the commment hun I see you have a new one I will be going through my friends list shortly and catching up with everyone lol ... and getting to read for a bit lol love and big hugs JayCee you would be in dreamland now sweetdreams huni lol (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Beauregard

15 years 11 months ago

You blow me away

with every poem you're improving 10-fold. You are the best hun! On line one, maybe "I [became] the slender reed" would sound a little better. What do you think? Kelsey "In criticism I will be bold, and as sternly, absolutely just with friend and foe. From this purpose nothing shall turn me." -Edgar Allan Poe "If technique is of no interest to a writer, I doubt that the writer is an artist." -Marianne Moore

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Kels

OMG thank you hun I didnt notice that I typo'd it its meant to say became funny how your mind sees what it thinks it wants lol but then I been a little busy lol love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

What can I say but Magnificent?

Your words sing with a truth that cannot be silenced, and shine with a light of their own! Just simply beautiful poetry! Kudos!

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Lonnie

thats just the best comment thank you so much I am glad you liked this one I knew not everyone would like it .. but sometimes I like writing stuff just for me and this is one of them selfish cow arent I lol big smile love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

greeneyes

15 years 11 months ago

This is why you are one of

This is why you are one of the best. My personal favorite poet by far! Your Fan, Elizabeth

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Elizabeth

I dont know about best I am competant, but thank you hun I appreciate the read and i've known you that long now ? your not my fan your my friend ;) lol love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

magics02

15 years 11 months ago

Good one again Jayne

I can hear you singing this one in your own style just like your poetry. acapella style. Nice girl Love and Hugs Mona xoxo

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Mona

When I get down and I need to feel better I write stuff like this ... its like a pouring of positive energy onto the page ... and if you can hear it I can sing it a cappella or other lol love and hugs JayCee p.s will answer your message tonight i am flat out trying to catch my own tail at the moment lol (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Dear JayCee

Brilliant write as always. Well done. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Xena

thanks for the lovely comment hun I do appreciate it love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

thin reed

just read.So tired eyes 'bout crossed.Reread and comment later.fondly......scribbler

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Stan

whenever you get time .. sleep well my friend love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

R.M.Shanmugam

15 years 11 months ago

the poem reflects in the

the poem reflects in the best style the purity of the heart. cheers. shan

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Shan

I bow in thanks ... I am always happy when you enjoy mine as I do yours love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

the other man's grass....

you say it beautifully jc as usual off to bed now hun. will have to catch up on your other writes tomorrow keep safe love and hugs judd xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Judd

Sorry for the late reply ... only just noticed this comment ... dont know why but some of my emails are missing .. weird anyway thanks for the comment I appreciate it love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)