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poewriter58
Jun 28, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Grieve Not

Grieve not over the loss
of your youth
it was given in preparation
for realities truths

Remember the wisdom
imparted  way back when
for you will need that wisdom
in the end

Use what you've learned
of the simplicities of life
like please and thank you
good morning and goodnight


Practice the golden rule
for it is so true
do unto others
as you would have them
do unto you

Smile at someone everyday
for it was given to you
to give away

Tell the ones that you hold dear
how much you love them
and will always need them near

There is enough going on
in everyday life
a bit of happiness
will lessen the strife

Be kind and generous in your praise
don't  let the rains  spoil the day
A little kindness
will go a long way


— poewriter58, Jun 28, 2010
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faithmairee

faithmairee

16 years ago

Very Uplifting

I really like this uplifting poem. It's full of wisdom and nicely written. People would be alot happier if they followed the suggestions in your poem. ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Faithmariee

Thank you very much for stopping by and reading. I appreciate it Chrys
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magics02

16 years ago

I admire this piece

Very nicely done and oh so true Poe. That is all I can say. Bravo to Poe!! Love,Mona xoxox
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Mona

Thank you so much Chrys
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years ago

A very relaxed write I like it much

It has a calming effect which I liked right at the start of the read. That first Stanza Kicked ass I thought. the 2nd line of the 2nd Stanza I know "way" back then may be a cliche or a hint to age, but I missed the "way" in the cadence of the line, as in a long and fruitful life imparts, but that is my mind calling for a sense of normals or sound surroundings I guess. I was looking for whats, wrong and right and their differences, stuff in a line or two in it, but they weren't in there either, but I didn't mind not seeing them in there. But thats just me, I guess. Over all an awesome poem. Donnie/Sinbad Rains? Why not Reins as a hint to who has a hold of them, to vague Maybe? You Got me wondering about things are you being a little passive or just relaxed.
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Donnie

I've changed that one line. As I told Jess(weirdelf) I will do something that will reflect what you are looking for thanks for your input Chrys
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Donnie

My old friend Neither , just very tired of it all it's always good to see you let me take a look when I am more awake at your suggestions Chrys
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Lonnie

16 years ago

So full of truth!

and that is something many of us forget that we need to hear! An excellent reminder that we need to return to the ways we were taught to respect as children, and quit being such a pain to one another! Bravo, Dear!
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Lon

Thank you. How many times have you heard me say this. Now we need it more than ever. Not just here on Neo Poet ,but everywhere. Anywhere one life touches another no matter how remote love ya Chrys
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Green Eyes

Thank you for stopping by and reading. I'm glad you liked the message. I try very hard to practice this in my own life. Sometimes I fail but I'm only human Chrys
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

"go placidly amidst the noise and haste"

nicely written Chrys, clear and true. But as you know I have a problem with didactic or inspiration poetry. If this was written in the first person with "examples" of how its helps you live I think it would be much stronger. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Jess

WOW I haven't seen you comment on one of my poems in a long time. Perhaps I will write another using your suggestion as I like the idea Chrys
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Mand

Thank you so much. I'm glad that you found it so as that was the whole idea Chrys
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Chrys

Beautiful poem ... reflecting peace I found this so calming to read ... thank you lol I needed something to sooth my mind sigh love JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Jess

HMMM thank you I think . Hey but this would make a good card wouldn't it. For those that need some comforting and peace of mind. I prefer Americn Greeting , they aren't as costly lol. Preaching? No I don't preach but you are entitled to see it as you wish. untalented ok if you say so who am I to argue, I think I have had enough of that this is why the poem was written but I disagree. Chrys
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Jess

Thank you sir I appreciate your re visit Chrys
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scribbler

16 years ago

sermonize

Just because wisdom can be found in many religion doesn't make it any less wise.I see quotes often on site,so seeing one in poem should be no surprise.See ya on the stream as we paddle along......scribbler
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Stan

Thank you for reading and commenting it is not a sermon I was just quoting the Golden Rule all I was saying was treat people the way you want to be treated. why it was seen as the sermon on the mount I don't know . If truth be known I seldom reveal my religious preferences , but there are very few things I belive about organized religion . and that is all I will say about that see you as we paddle along , yes Chrys an afterthought perhaps it is my use of the word unto that makes it sound like a sermon lol ah well can't please them all now can we
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Jay Cee

Thank you very much. I think we all do. I'm glad you found it peaceful. You see this was my way of retaliating over what is going on here and in the world today Chrys
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scribbler

16 years ago

grieve not

Good words to live by whether religion based or not........scribbler
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Stan

Thank you once again. You klnow I think it was my use of unto however unto does not have religious conotations as in render unto Caesar that whic is his Chrys
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shirley harrison

16 years ago

Ah so true and beautiful!

Dear Chrys beautiful poetry, here we can all take a lesson and it speaks loud and clear "a Joy to read" much love shirley harrison
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poewriter58

16 years ago

shirely

Thank you very much Chrys
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Chrys

Wow. Excellent advice, here a little kindness goes a long way. Love, Cat
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Cat

Doesn't it though. Thank you Chrys
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years ago

I Like the "Way" in the Line I hope you do too

And I hope you didn't do it for any of Us, but for you after all it is your Poem is it not? With that said You know how my brain works from time to time it is almost perfect the poem in "my brains Eyes" but, I would have to change the last line in Stanza 5 I am an offender of the repeated word but that is me and not you Boo who I think you may know what I am hinting at and I'll leave it at that. Lovely poem Donnie/Sinbad
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Donnie

Let me have another look, I'm always open that is what we are here for is it not Chrys yes ME I think that is one of my pet peeves and yet I am the offender herelol took another look what do you think about it was gifted to you to give away yes , no , maybe
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years ago

Nawh, I like the Given to better then gifted to

I was hinting more to the last line. Maybe some thing along these lines. An added thought or a reversal of the previous line. eg. to give and to give away or to give and to be given away, that way I would see the give and given Ideas repeated thrice or a variety of other combos, but this repeat or tri-union concept is always on my mind. past, present, future, life, death, rebirth ect. Sorry to have side track your flow of verse I didn't mean to interject my thoughts into your crafted poem. And Gifted makes me think firstly of a talent and the type of read I am shouldn't be your main target. Have a great day Donnie/ Sinbad Just so you now where i am coming from for the repeat in my eyes we can wear smiles and/ or we can impart them to others so the gift of a smile is ours to contain or to share If that make any sense to ya, that is what crawl into my mind when I hinted at you, but I have a troubled mind in its operations. see ya around the block TTFN
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

“Go placidly amidst the

"Go placidly amidst the haste*... there are some of us who remember the great poems on the same subject. It is then that some of our efforts to re-write in our own words, words that are so burned into our hearts and minds that rewrites (no matter whose!) are at best unnecessary, and at worst, a poor imitation. Having said that, there are many who haven't read (or remember) the greats, and for these folks, a rewrite is the perfect medium to grok what we already have been privileged to read in our youth. When poetry uplifts us, it is good. But to make it *personal*, to personalize what we have learned through our individual life-experiences is even better. Sharing that through poetry is the best. ~A The whole modern world has divided itself into Conservatives and Progressives. The business of Progressives is to go on making mistakes. The business of the Conservatives is to prevent the mistakes from being corrected. G.K. Chesteron
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Anna

If you found this to be an imiataion of the great classics , well what can I say. I bearly remember them so there was now intention of imating anything when I wrote this. Perhaps some of what I learned a wayyyy back in high scholl is implanted somewhere in my brain and it found it's way out Chrys Thanks for the visit
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raj

16 years ago

Dear Chrys

I loved this poem not just because of the wonderful message which is its theme...but also because it is a reality check for everyone to pause ...ponder and reflect about who they are..what is their role in this life and hoe they are expected to lead the life... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Raj

Thank you That was the whole idea of this poem Chrys
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raj

16 years ago

Chrys

i am glad i got the them right... the moe one reads this piece one absorbs more... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)

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