LOVE´S EXECUTIONER*

"It was always a case of one-upmanship,who would fall or better stillslip. I fell. I would've eaten crumbs, from your outstretched hand -but my parched petulancewas more than you could stand.So I stood. I would've bled white,blanched from an open wound,to save you from the slap of fateand sorrow of misfortune. So I bled. I would've held upmy heart for renttorn apart, trampled,neglected, wrecked.I am spent. One word would have suffıcedNot poetry; nor wisdom,

not being nice.
I choose not to remain broken

only bent..."

Bjr 28 June '10
*Title from a book by Irvin Yalom

— Bonitaj, Jun 28, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

Critiques

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear boni

"Parched petulance" is great. It really stood out, for me. Always, Cat

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

CAT!

since we both understand the same genre of sentiment in our poetry - glad I was able to offer you something meaningful! Cheers Boni

faithmairee

15 years 11 months ago

Wow! Great Poem

I really enjoyed your poem. It is unique. I love the raw emotion in it and its genuine feel. ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

Hi Faithmaree

So good of you to stop by. Glad you enjoyed it and saw the intended sincerity! Cheers Bonita j

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Boni

Youe muse is back ... in full force that parched petulance ? nice line I loved it ... the whole poem stands on its own and there isnt much i would change and I love the suggestion of shape at the beginning of each line draws the readers eye you cant not follow it ;) one of your best I really loved this one Boni ... love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

Hello JayCee!

Isn't it sometimes amazing how unpredictable one's own assessment of one's work is? I didn't find this piece at all good - merely put it out there on record as it were - kind of like the journalling, I am want to do! Well there it is! So glad it made sense to you gals! Ciao Boni

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

i love this

so especially love the finish tiny typo i think - 'One word would have surficed.' (sufficed?) love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks Judy-Anne

ıt seems there's many a spellıng error twıxt my cup and my keyboard... :) Thanks for your encouragement once agaın! CHeers Bonı