lou

Jun 28, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Metro Sexuality

I watch primping in the mirror
moisturizing you're smooth skin
and plucking stray eye brows

You think your prettier than me

You visit the spa
and wear a face pack
don't let it crack

You're good enough to eat

You could be a hand model
if you so choose
you've never done a scrap of hard labour

Bet you kiss your reflection
in each puddle that you pass
and dye your greying hair

I suppose that you wear manscara ?

Do you know that you're a man ?
if you didn't have male genitalia
i'd really have to guess

— lou, Jun 28, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

Critiques

hobo

15 years 11 months ago

lol

lol I hope you are not writing about me haha. funny read my friend *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Randy

Of course it's about you lol love lou xx

U K Atiyodi

15 years 11 months ago

Metro Sexuality

Sure, all of us love ourselves and next our image in a mirror. All other love come next. A good poem with compressed ideas. Continue to write such lines.

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Hi

Thank you lou xx

temidayo

15 years 11 months ago

cool work vivid

nice work imaginitive as if i am watching the subject vivid it is.but i think you missed the spelling of mascara and also a face mask not face pack but it still conveys the intended meaning ,incase i said something wrong am new here just fresh from eliteskills . com

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Hi

Manscara is what they call mascara made especially for men. i'll think about face mask. Thank you for your comments . lou xx

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

I got your...

comment about manscara. I think the reference to face pack is ok. However, the word that you use for your['s] deserves an apostrophe. Also, I think [you] is missing from the first line. You['re] good enough to eat, and you['re] a man? Either that or you [are]. Very nice! LOL, At least it is a nice rant! I get the picture! Love ya, Gee xx

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Gee

Thanks for your help. lou xx

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Lou

Favorite lines: Bet you kiss your reflection in each puddle that you pass and dye your greying hair but the last verse is unclear to me. Could just be me. Always, Cat

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

metro

Glad I'm not the only one contemptuous of these over preening fools lol.well put with a touch of humor dahling........scribbler

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Scribbler

Thanks

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Nice one Lou

too much self esteme can leave you lonely! L:O:L love your mind on this! much love shirley harrison

lou

15 years 11 months ago

shirley

thanks much love lou xx

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Late for the party Lou sorry

Very nice. Too much is placed on who we want to be and not into who we are. No amount of makeup or dressing up can change us. We are what nature intended us to be, and if we have to be different to feel better about ourselves then I guess, that’s what we have to do...Great write Lou. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

loved

15 years 11 months ago

is it a reference

....to the ASS that's me? hopefully let it be let it be let it be please say it once only will ye just wonderful from the fathoms of my heart a volcano erupts as does in the oil spill in MEXICO

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Loved

Ass is a reference to your joke in ur poem , that answered my comment. And was in the spirit of humorous , light hearted banter. Thanks Lou xx

loved

15 years 11 months ago

i know i know

..i am a humourist now that u do know ass i am better now than a donkey what have now to say ye??????? once a girl long long ago said to me loved ur more holy than righteous a holed up sweater is all i then had she could not replace it for free... so i adopted her name as LOVELY

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Not an ass

Beautiful Love Lou xx

DawningDaytripper

15 years 11 months ago

Not an easy subject to

Not an easy subject to tackle with taste and good humor, well done. As for suggestions I am lacking, but it was a very good read. Julie D.D. Hello all, come and join us in live chat! Meet n' greet, Neo night, lonely poems, teen night. We have something for everyone, come and meet your community!

lou

15 years 11 months ago

DD

Thank you Much love Lou xx