Seren

Jun 28, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Discovering Hope

I cried a new galaxy of stars
wondering if all was lost,
and I braved a new world
thinking the old was diminished

but all was not lost
and nothing diminished,
as one light snuffs out
another ignites

rising over the breast
of a new world, rests Hope,
glimmering minutely but glittering
the stars of our universe

— Seren, Jun 28, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Dalton

16 years ago

as one light snuffs

as one light snuffs out another ignites a linking chain of souls eternital, beautiful. hope you are well, john

Seren

16 years ago

I read the poem anna posted in her blog earlier on and remembered I had written this and decided to finish it off thanks for the lovely comment its much appreciated love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

xena465

16 years ago

Dear JayCee

Congratulations on chairing the AEC, you deserve it. So I’m not surprised that this lovely write reflects that you feel good. Hugs & kisses to you xxx Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Xena

its kind of a wish for the new term really .. that we get lots of work done and improve the site in peace ... Xena thanks for the congrates I hope you run again you have worked so hard for the site and I hope you know that it is noticed love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

xena465

16 years ago

Thanks JayCee

I do know that it's noticed by the people who matter and that makes me feel good, and gives me the incentive to do my best for Neo as a greeter and member. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Xena

And I just noticed this one too ... huni I am so sorry for the late reply I guess i Missed these being so busy in our first week ... your a hard worker Xena ... not many people realise how much work goes in behind the scenes here to keep this place running ... but I do And I cant thank you enough love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Kailashana

16 years ago

We all have our own version

We all have our own version of hope, JayCee. Lovely to *see* yours. ~ The whole modern world has divided itself into Conservatives and Progressives. The business of Progressives is to go on making mistakes. The business of the Conservatives is to prevent the mistakes from being corrected. G.K. Chesteron

Seren

16 years ago

your poem earlier reminded

your poem earlier reminded me I had written this so I finished it off and here it is, very happy you like it (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear lil Sis

You write with such flare and passion. Favorite lines: rising over the breast of a new world, rests Hope, glimmering minutely but glittering the stars of our universe (but do you want to use "diminished" twice?) Love, Cat

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Cat

I wondered about the use of it twice I will have a look at replacing it in the edits thanks for the beautiful comment I appreciate it love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Rett

16 years ago

Jayne, beautifully written

I tried hard to find something to critique and the only thing I could even remotely try on was the first line and I am not sure I would delete new or not. In other words. Fine job ! Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Rett

Big Smile really glad you liked this one ... I gotta tell you the one word I considered removing before i submitting was that new in the first line I think your right lol ... will fix it in the edits thanks for the comment appreciated love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

scribbler

16 years ago

hope

Being the new chairman I guess I should now refer to you as Madam Chairman ?lol If anybody can avoid big head,it's you.Enjoyed read and kind of agree with Rett.Don't think new should be deleted but maybe moved to:galaxy of new stars.Seems that it may add to impact there.just opinion........scribbler

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Stan

I gotta say I love how you make me laugh I always smile at your comments lol I hope we can work together but if as the chair I can push a few things threw and work my fellow aec members a little lol then I will push ... we already ahve two positions filled that were vacant and its exciting to be doing something positive for the site that 'new' is a thorn in my side I like the suggestion when I submitting this one I considered removing it and I have to agree with Rett I think without has a better flow but please keep making suggestions I love getting feedback and other ideas love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

magics02

16 years ago

Chock full of goodness

Like a splendid cup of coffee and good company this is what this poem did for me. Out of the ballpark and wonderful vision it left me this evening. Love to you Mona xoxoxo

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Mona

Glad I could leave you feeling good Mona ... good vibes all round I hope lol you have a great evening and I will catch up with you in the next couple of days love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

shirley harrison

16 years ago

Wow Seren

this is a beautiful piece that says one door closes and another one opens! just wonderful and hopefull much love shirley harrison

Seren

16 years ago

Holy Vegemite Sandwiches lol

Shirley I am so sorry for not seeing this comment before now just came to do an edit and found your message thanks for the wonderful comment sorry to get here so late I apologise love and big hugs JayCee x xx (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Chris B

16 years ago

Great Feeling

Very comforting. Thank you.

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Chris

thanks for the lovely comment love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

greeneyes

16 years ago

As always, perfection.

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Elizabeth

Thanks so much for your lovely comment I really appreciate the read love and big hugs JayCee x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

judyanne

16 years ago

i missed this first time around

beautiful thoughts and words of hope jc i love this hugs judd xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Judd

Dont feel bad I am sure your flat out with work and your book etc ... I appreciate the read and the comment oi oi oi love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

U K Atiyodi

16 years ago

Discovering Hope

Past cannot be removed because it is the step stone to the culture in the present. Wonderfully well-written, the idea seems to be quite true. Kudos, poet.

Seren

16 years ago

Dear U.K

Thank you so much for the read and the comment I really appreciate it ... the past are our stepping stones sometimes its easier to not look down walking over the them though ;) love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

raj

16 years ago

Dear JayCee

simply put i find this write to be an inspiration to those who have lost self belief...reading this would provide them the elixir of hope...and regain their self belief... a very motivating write... much love...raj (sublime_ocean)...

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