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raj

Dreaming of Spring

From the peaks of the lofty mountains
to the plains around its foot hills
you made me soar like an eagle
before alighting on grassy fields
you gave me the wings
to explore the beautiful sights
leaving me breathless
in an orgasmic delight

The waning moon now glides
across those lofty peaks
waving before she dips
wearing her crescent smile
foothills now shorn of grass
once tall in winter greens
its blades are now drooping
dreaming of Spring...

raj (sublime_ocean)...



 
— raj, Jun 27, 2010

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Raj

What a lovely concoction of words and lines that make up this piece Beautiful imagery and expression of emotions. Favorite lines: From the peaks of the lofty mountains to the plains around its foot hills you made me soar like an eagle before alighting on grassy fields you gave me the wings to explore the beautifull sights leaving me breathless in an orgasmic delight (just one L in beautiful) Always, Cat
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raj

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Cat

thank you for your lovely comment which is as refreshing as Spring i appreciate too the correction in the spelling which i have done instantly... gratefully....raj (sublime_ocean)
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Spring

Beautiful Raj. Spring wasn't so good here in Glasgow this year. The daffodils only bloomed for a few days and the weather killed them off, leaving just their stems. I normally fill my house with them for weeks, but not this year. But it doesn’t spoil the real beauty of spring as this and autumn is my favourite seasons. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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raj

15 years 11 months ago

Hello Xena

sorry to know about the Daffodils...just like you missed them they must have missed you too...nice of you to drop a comment while passing by... warmly..raj (sublime_ocean)
faithmairee

faithmairee

15 years 11 months ago

Very Lovely

I love Spring. Your use of imagery in this poem is wonderful and the flow is great as well. Very nicely done. Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
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raj

15 years 11 months ago

Hello Faith

very nice of you to stop by and drop your encouraging comment...when are you posting something new?...i am looking forward for a read.. ..raj(sublime_ocean)
mona

mona

15 years 11 months ago

What a lovely words

I love spring time ,and I love the poems about it. I liked your poem and I don't have favorite lines because all the poem is great I'm glad you shared this beautiful poem with us. From the peaks of the lofty mountains to the plains around its foot hills you made me soar like an eagle before alighting on grassy fields you gave me the wings to explore the beautiful sights leaving me breathless in an orgasmic delight The waning moon now glides across those lofty peaks waving before she dips wearing her crescent smile foothills now shorn of grass once tall in winter greens its blades are now drooping dreaming of Spring…
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raj

15 years 11 months ago

thank you Mona for your

thank you Mona for your appreciation...i derived a lot of satisfaction writing it and its nice to know friends here liked it too... as for sharing it...i am not a professional writer...but an amateur..all the more reason for me to share it and learn from the comments and critique...besides sharing in itself is such a tremendous pleasure...like the blooms bloom even more when their fragrance and beauty is appreciated ...so does sharing ... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)...
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Raj

Sublime poem ... I bow nothing more to add and nothing to correct imo love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
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raj

15 years 11 months ago

Dear JayCee

i am all smiles after reading your comment...like a student after getting pat on the back ...a comment like that coming from a friend who now is also Chairman of Neopoet is the reason for the smile... love n hugs....raj (sublime_ocean)..
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

15 years 10 months ago

I second Jayne's comment

Ann of Norway Love mountains, love eagles, love soaring in air, love this poem of freedom in the bondage of love. Ann.