The Weep

Pearls splash black in tea

Dampen trembling note in hands

Crystals drop sadly

Seep, stain thirsty earth’s parchment

Tears falling outside and in

— judyanne, Jun 27, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Judy

Imagery rich and lingers on the tongue! Nicely constructed. Love, Cat

xena465

16 years ago

Nice Judy

I don't know much about this kind of form, but it sure sounds good to me.... "Tears falling outside in". Does it for me this line alone. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

scribbler

16 years ago

weep

Don't know much about Senryu ,but this read well to me...........scribbler

mand

16 years ago

Same as above comments Judy!

Same as above comments Judy! I think I should look into it and other types of poetry. Love Mand xxxx

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Judd

I really liked this but I have to be honest somethings missing ... I will copy it and have a look at it tomorrow if you would like ? sorry to have not gotten back to your question on the wings poem I forgot to answer you so I am so sorry love and hugs JayCee x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

judyanne

16 years ago

thanks everybody

scribbler senryu apparently deals with social situations - usually in a satirical way i think and hiaku deals with nature however, i thought this was tanka with the extra lines - who knows really. thanks everyone for reading and commenting i haven't been well lately - a bit of a head cold - so i haven't been here much doing as much reading as usual. just climbed on now to put one last poem on for the competition. i will catch up with you all soon. love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

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