(for stream, censored to:) I JUST DON'T FORNICATING CARE

I don't know who this is you don't care a F*** about, sorry I don't swear on line...much!!! But that's one hell, I don't mind saying `hell` of a blow out. Five stars for getting it off your chest. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Good rhyme and meter but a bit vague as to implied lack of caring.lol!If you care,could omit "then" in:'cause if you block my way then...and:and then just f#$king fry.Hope this venting was good for you.......scribbler

There is sure a change to your writes and I hope you felt better after wards and who or what are you referring to blowing up may I ask. You obviously mad at someone or something. I would try this out to but probably never post it lmao after all my Professor did'nt teach me these things in college in my writing course. Is this a song you are writing? Magics

We can write our mood and sometimes it is not always sublime and sweet as it can be down right fashion crude and blase.. I hear what you say I feel you and I was like man this one really peeved off about something. lmao your fine. continue your writes professor P. Mona:) xxxxxoxox

Thought I'd give it a little edit, if that's alright.... I don’t give a shit I don’t give a shit I don’t give a shit and I don’t I don’t fucking care Looking down at me you think you know what’s best** Well I don’t give a damn if I don’t pass your test** Just leave me be, get off your high horse If you try to block my way, I won’t change my course The games you play the, faces you wear And what you think of me: I don’t fucking care If it’s above my head, if I just don’t get it Then shove it up your ass ‘cause I don’t give a shit I don’t give a shit no I don’t give a shit I don’t give a shit and I don’t I don’t fucking care Your pieces of wit, your words of wisdom Your jumped-up shit only brings me boredom I can’t fucking stand you and I won’t even try I just hope you'll get to hell and just fucking fry The games you play the, faces you wear And what you think of me: I don’t fucking care If it’s above my head, if I just don’t get it Then shove it up your ass ‘cause I don’t give a shit I don’t give a shit no I don’t give a shit I don’t give a shit and I don’t I don’t fucking care I’ve had enough of you and your bitchy voice You can disappear or die, it’s your fucking choice I feel like throwing up; you’re so fucking proud And when I blow you up it’ll be so fucking loud The games you play the, faces you wear And what you think of me: I don’t fucking care If it’s above my head, if I just don’t get it Then shove it up your ass ‘cause I don’t give a shit I don’t give a shit no I don’t give a shit I don’t give a shit and I don’t I don’t fucking care I just rearranged some things, added, blah di blah. I do like what you've written I just felt it needed an edit. I'm sure what I've edited will need an edit as well, but hopefully some of my edits help? Maybe help you see how to make it better? The first 2 lines of the second stanza (or verse because it feels more like a song or rap) I put stars beside because I think it's a little trite, rhyming best and test and the kind of adolescent angst dripping from those lines. I think they could be changed or removed or whatever, I just know that I don't find them that appealing and I think what you've written could do without them. Just my opinion, please don't lose your shit/blow up at me. :) JRS

Loved it! I feel the same way!

The problem is I am just not sure what you are trying to say lol. I love it. great read *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*