Lady Pain (a co-write with Hooded Stranger)

I was reminded of the song wild horses by the rolling stones ... sad poem of despair of self destruction my friend brilliant love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Very touching, I started to feel bad for this person I don't know. I like how "her shuddering denial denied..." some might find it repetitive but I think it hammers the point in. The title is great, strong theme. Antoine

Gave me goose-pimples. I'm with JayCee in what she felt...Fabulously written and of course, great write. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Oh Cat, what can I say, something different for me. Indeed it is and so very Eddy. I was trying to pick out the parts I really liked, but I kept reading and scrolling down and could only find these lines I liked: wild horses couldn’t stop her from ruining her life. She was hell bent on destruction and all her shuddering denial denied her intentions of exposing her tender pink silk and satin underbelly and all her feminine frills like tea and crumpets she needs her fix of love and pain laced with daily humiliation. She knew she could never go home again, because the pain was so delicious oh how much she loved the chilling rain like a shot of liquid barbed wire shooting through her veins and wild horses couldn’t stop her… the rest of the poem was rubbish!! Lol! I see you mentioned these are lyrics, hmmm, maybe a chorus is required? Great story, sad but intriguing. I really liked this one. Your second Eddy Styz book must be nearly complete. I don't know what it is, but I like the words 'hell bent'...I used them on a write a while ago and wondered why I hadn't used them before...they add something that I can't put my finger on. Excellent write, although I'd expect nothing less from an AEC member...lead by example my friend. regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

What a team you both are and work so great together. Really enjoyed this by both of you and Golden lady a great big COngrates to you gal on making your next term. Good luck and happy for you all Love Mona ooxox ps Hood miss ya guy

WOW I had no idea this was in the offering and what a combination this is and I like how both your styles combine no doubt who wrote the chorus and it works so well with the theme running seamlessly through well done a treat I was not expecting and spot too congrats to both of you ,,,,,,,zigs

shuddering denial , denied hmmm kind of got stuck there Wow excellent work you two . Now I'm jealous lol You work very well together enoyed this immensily lol had to laugh at strangers favorite lines Chrys

to work as a team in wariting poem is the hardest thing, egoes clashing. yet done well with a mono voice. a rapid style. shan

Good stuff but, It would read better if you didn't have dinied and dinial following eachother in line 7 and 8. Apart from then a very powerful poem. love lou xx

through this write you have taken me to that place where pain and pleasure meet ...a very lively narration speckled with metaphors which perfectly re-create the mood and sensations... the favorite lines have stayed with me which bring out the essence of the poem so well... She knew she could She knew she could never go home again, because the pain was so delicious oh how much she loved the chilling rain like a shot of liquid barbed wire shooting through her veins and wild horses couldn’t stop her… warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)

The pain in this was so self-evident and the pathology so high-lighted - I had to look away! Awesome write! Bonita j

A lot! I would stick with "denial denied". Antoine