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Mari Shine
Jun 27, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Decadently Sinful..................

'' I Love You'', I whisper seductively
as I hold you, just a breath away from my lips
Trace your outline tenderly
with gentle strokes from my
soft finger tips
Desire flows as I inhale
the sweet scent of
you
Satin smooth to my touch
You, I so want to devour but
you haven't got a clue
yet
I lick you all over
Savour your flavour
Your moist taste on
my tongue
new sensations deliver
as you melt so
sensually
No more time to chat
All my decadent sinful desires
fulfilled
As I eat my favourite
Chocolate
— Mari Shine, Jun 27, 2010
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Critiques

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Hello

nice to meet you. Your poem is erotically stimulating in a tasteful sense. I think it told the story very well. ellipses are three dots... anymore than that seems pretentious to me. Always, Cat
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

My first thought was HOT!

Then I got to the end, but as they say “chocolate can give the same pleasure as sex”, so I guess it is HOT...Brilliant...I love it...chocolate too. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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Mari Shine

16 years ago

THANK YOU!

DEAR CAT & XENA, THANK YOU BOTH, SO VERY MUCH FOR READING AND FOR YOUR MOST KIND COMMENTS. BLESSINGS & LIGHT, MARI
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Mari Shine

16 years ago

Thank You!

Hello Patrick, THANK YOU for reading and commenting on my poem. Yes, I first posted this on Poet Freak, must be over a week ago now and posted on PH yesterday but deleted my work there today as the site is really acting up badly at the moment and I was unable to even send a Thank You message to someone............. Thank You again for both reading and commenting so generously. Blessings & Light, Mari
Dennis Go

Dennis Go

16 years ago

Yummy!

A brilliant piece, stimulating to the senses! Give me some more chocolate :)
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Mari Shine

16 years ago

THANK YOU!

THANK YOU so very much for taking time out to read Dennis and to comment so kindly - smilesssssssssss!!!!!!!! Thank You again, Dennis. Enjoy a lovely evening, blessed and peaceful. Mari
chumfin

chumfin

16 years ago

again am speechless, you

again am speechless, you mislead my mind, where i thought you where heading to was not where you eventually landed, you know what you are a poeeeeeeeeettttttt. chumfin
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Mari Shine

16 years ago

Thank You!

I am SO pleased you enjoyed this poem with a 'twist' at the end Chumfin. THANK YOU so very much for reading and for your lovely comment. Bless you Chumfin. Mari
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Dalton

16 years ago

This made me laugh

This made me laugh, in a good way, you think she's talking about sex but she's actually talking about chocolate. four stars. john
chumfin

chumfin

16 years ago

I HONESTLY DID , but

I HONESTLY DID , but eventually it was the good old chocolate she was talking about. it was not a naughty poem , but you were a little bit naughty with the skills ((((laughs))) you are indeed a true poet. chumfin
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Mari Shine

16 years ago

So delighted you enjoyed a

So delighted you enjoyed a chuckle reading this poem John. Hope it was not a naughty one????? So pleased you liked the twist at the end! Thank You so very much for reading and commenting so kindly. Blessings.......

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