Spouse's angst

My spouse's dilemma

YOU UNDERSTAND THE DILEMMA
BUT IT CURBS
AND
DISTURBS
ONES CREATIVITY
YET I RISK IT
AS THERE IS NO LIFE
WITHOUT A SPOUSE
MALE OR FEMALE
AND IF YOU HAVE TO ACHIEVE
RISK IT EITHER WAY
YOU SHALL DECEIVE
UNLESS YOU YOURSELF
YOUR MINDS WISDOM SEAL
AND
CONTROL THE CIRCUMSTANCES
AND
the ENVIRONMENT
LAUGH AT YOURSELF
THAT SHALL DO
HOPEFULLY THE SPOUSE WILL
FINALLY GIVEN IN TOO.

Please read in
SMALL CASE .
NO not shouting
my eyes I can't
blame daily.

— loved, Jun 27, 2010

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Critiques

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Loved

Sounds like this write is talking about give and take in a marriage. It’s not too clear to me Loved. I’m a bit slow sometimes. If this is so, I’m all for it, if a relationship is worth saving. Just one line I faltered with... FINALLY {GIVEN} IN TOO. ………………perhaps you mean [GIVE] here Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Loved

I agree with Xena on the clarity issue. I know a few people who are very happy and content to live their lives single. Single is better than in the pain of a bad marriage. Always, Cat

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Loved

I liked it very much but line 5 is grammatically incorrect , maybe you could cut out in and just say 'one's creativity'. Apart from that a lovely read. Love Lou xx

loved

15 years 11 months ago

thanks for the five

i have deleted it yes my spell check grammar check is not working thanks glad u liked it 5555555555555 wow