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Kronos continuously creeping steadily in my childhood Mays

now sprints past sometimes in spasms seemingly jumping whole days.

And I wander in a beautiful garden in those missing hours.

Memories are misty in my mind but I still can smell the flowers.

 

A face fades in and out of my vision. A stranger yet I should know him.

I stare at pleading soul ravaged caverns and a bright diamond forms at their rim.

While I watch it tumble past wrinkled parchment through befuddled veils I try to fathom,

while my bewildered mind peers past the roses, just where that falling star has come from.

 

And I hear a voice echo from afar. Now it’s time to go home sir.

She really won’t know you're not here, and we’ll look after her.

 

 

— judyanne, Jun 26, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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Lonnie

15 years 11 months ago

Very heartfelt poetry!

You can tell that much emotion went into this piece, and it seeps through the words like tears through a tissue! Nice job!
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

i'm a nurse lonnie

i worked in aged care for a long time in this write i tried to describe the separation of an elderly couple - she with alzheimers - i changed the title since you read it too - from her eyes, while still hinting at the pain of the partner, who is really the one i as a nurse feel for. (she's happy in her new world.) i'm glad you felt the emotion. love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

15 years 11 months ago

hello Judy

I really like how you've blended your academic/professional side with your poetic self! written with an empathy that shines through without maudlin sentiment! Nice write! Boni
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

thanks boni

for the visit and the great comment love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

thanks scribbler

love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

you have the ability to tap

you have the ability to tap into the emotions of your reader this is really a wonderful poem take a bow oi oi oi love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

thanks jc

love and big hugs back judd xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Judy

This is so sad, it really touched me deeply because I have been there with my mother. Great rhyming and flow. Love, Cat
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

thanks cat

sorry if i hit a raw spot love to you judy ps - btw nothing about the knee surprises me - i've seen so many people take so long to get over knee ops and i know (at least have seen enough to know - haven't had to undergo one myself thank the universe) how painful they are and for such a long time.... my thoughts are with you cat thanks for the lovely comment hugs xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
SH

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Judy

you see every side to every coin of life, i really am truly amazed by your talents as it is not easy to shake a person you have never met, but you shake me every time i read your passionate and beautiful poetry! with much love shirley harrison
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

so lovely of you shirley

you do boost my confidence love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html