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Jun 26, 2010
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Kronos continuously creeping steadily in my childhood Mays
now sprints past sometimes in spasms seemingly jumping whole days.
And I wander in a beautiful garden in those missing hours.
Memories are misty in my mind but I still can smell the flowers.
A face fades in and out of my vision. A stranger yet I should know him.
I stare at pleading soul ravaged caverns and a bright diamond forms at their rim.
While I watch it tumble past wrinkled parchment through befuddled veils I try to fathom,
while my bewildered mind peers past the roses, just where that falling star has come from.
And I hear a voice echo from afar. Now it’s time to go home sir.
She really won’t know you're not here, and we’ll look after her.
— judyanne, Jun 26, 2010
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Lonnie
16 years ago
Very heartfelt poetry!
judyanne
16 years ago
i'm a nurse lonnie
judyanne
16 years ago
also altered line 8 to give what i feel is better rhythm.
Bonitaj
16 years ago
hello Judy
judyanne
16 years ago
thanks boni
scribbler
16 years ago
admission
judyanne
16 years ago
thanks scribbler
Seren
16 years ago
you have the ability to tap
judyanne
16 years ago
thanks jc
Candlewitch
16 years ago
Dear Judy
judyanne
16 years ago
thanks cat
shirley harrison
16 years ago
Judy
judyanne
16 years ago
so lovely of you shirley
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