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mona
mona
Jun 26, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Messages to unknown beloved..."first message"

My beloved
If you are crazy
just like me
just like me
then,
you will throw
every thing behind
and you will sleep
in my eyes
— mona, Jun 26, 2010

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Country/Region: LBY

Favorite Poets: Some Arab poets, my love once, .....Dear friends too

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lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Mona

The first line should say 'My beloved,'. Line 7 might be better if it said something like throw caution to the wind. A lovely romantic theme. nice choice of words and imgery. flows quite well. Good job. love lou xx
mona

mona

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks my dear

It was a good advice from great person like you. MONA
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Mona

Thanks lou xx
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 11 months ago

Interesting!

This poem brought me in, it's a well written piece, good job!
mona

mona

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks

I'm glad that you like it,and I hope you will read the next of my messages to my unknown beloved
chumfin

chumfin

15 years 11 months ago

ARABIAN QUEEN!

SHORT BUT VERY SWEET POEM, it very good it coming straight from the heart, i would suggest, you can add more line to it, it would be great, chumfin
mona

mona

15 years 11 months ago

Thankyouuuuuuuuu

My dear I appreciate your opinion ,but still I will add more lines but in another messages for my unknown beloved.
weirdelf

weirdelf

15 years 11 months ago

exquisite in beauty, form and content

not a letter out of place. This poem expands behind the eyes into volumes. That is the mark of really good poetry. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,
mona

mona

15 years 11 months ago

Thank youuuuuuuuuu

I'm happy that you like it,and I will be more happy if you will read the rest of my "messages to my unknown beloved"
Professor Purple

Professor Purple

15 years 11 months ago

Great!

Very direct and gripping. "Sleep in my eyes" What a beautiful picture! Antoine
mona

mona

15 years 11 months ago

Sleeping in my eyes

Only in two places I will hide my beloved: MY EYES OR MY HEART every thing is possible in poetry ,love and with love. Is n't it? MONA
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Mona

beautiful poem I am just sorry I found it late wonderful work Mona love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
mona

mona

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Seren

It is so strange ,and not easy to write love messages for unknown beloved,,,who is he?..where is he?....many questions in my mind ,,, I just got an idea and I would like you to share it with me .Here in Neopoet. MONA
hobo

hobo

15 years 11 months ago

Your eyes

Your eyes have touched my soul and I will sleep in them for eternity. *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*
mona

mona

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Hobo

Your eyes have touched my soul and I will sleep in them for eternity. *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down* Thanks for this beautiful words I'm blushed; as you are a photographer I will send you different kinds of pictures have been taken, I hope you will like it.Some of it will be about traditional customs and traditional clothes in my country. I will use some here as an Avatar. Mona
faithmairee

faithmairee

15 years 11 months ago

very beautiful

this is very beautiful....you have said so much in so few words...it is very profound, mona...i love it! Love-faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~