hobo

Jun 26, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Something In Me

You found me lying dead
Face down in the grass
Buried alive in my shame

For some strange reason
You saw something in me
Something worth saving

So layer by layer
Piece by piece
You uncovered me

Picked me up
Dusted me off
Gave me value

Now I was worth something
Something to you
Something to me

Your lips touched mine
Breathed life into my soul
Set me free

Because you saw something
Something in me

— hobo, Jun 26, 2010

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

lou

16 years ago

Randy

I like title,language use was expressive ,the rhythm fit The poem. I loved the theme very romantic and emotional. I thought the beginning was very dramatic, and the ending very tender. Love Lou xx

hobo

16 years ago

Thank you my friend

Thank you my friend, I am glad you liked it *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*

shirley harrison

16 years ago

Ah Hobo the Great!

beautiful write full of hope and trust and kindness. much love always shirl....... shirley harrison

hobo

16 years ago

thank you my friend

Thank you my friend, I am glad you like it. Oh by the way I love it when you call me hobo the great lol it does make me feel good *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*

magics02

16 years ago

Great little poem

Packs a punch to go with lunch. Really a sweet one here Hobo and that is all the crit I can give at this wee hour of the morning. Mona xxxo ps worthy of a nom and the five stars also;)

hobo

16 years ago

Thank you

Thank you so very much my friend, I am glad you like it *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*

xena465

16 years ago

I agree with all of the above. To have such love and passion for who you share you life with is precious. Even with all your kidding around with some of your poems, which we absolutely love, you’re just a big softy at heart. And that’s why we love you. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

hobo

16 years ago

It's good to be loved

I can live with being called a big softy lol. it sure is good to be loved haha. thank you my friend, I am glad you like this poem *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*

faithmairee

16 years ago

It Moved Me

I like this one alot! Your lips touched mine Breathed life into my soul Set me free Because you saw something Something in me Those are my favorite lines although they are all beautifully written. Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

hobo

16 years ago

Your too kind

Thank you my friend you are too kind but I will take it haha. I am glad you like it *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Randy

I came here late and most of it has already been said and I agree with all the comments here. I like the hopefulness of this piece. Always, Cat

hobo

16 years ago

Thank you

Thank you my friend, better late than never lol *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*

scribbler

16 years ago

in me

amazing how loved ones manage to see in us what we fail to........scribbler

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