Beads on my forehead

Beads on my forehead
A message alerted mehe was on his way .... my forehead went numb
with fear and surprise beads of sweat dripped down the sides
my heart’s palpitation stood still
as down my spine
went an electric chill. he would be here any moment Oh what Ecstasy and joy ....my heart beat trembled with loveas he held my fingers and squeezed it a bit was it reality
I wondered still.
His lips brushed against mine my tongue remained glued and lo and behold his hands plundered I’d wonder
what to do .Alas twas what I wanted it.As his lips
caressed my eyes too...
I woke up and smiled twas pitch darka lone star winked from the distancebut I was all wet
that very instant
Alas he didn’t make it
but perhaps he would.

— loved, Jun 26, 2010

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Critiques

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Loved

the dreaming anticipation is depicted very well, nice work one of your best love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

loved

16 years 1 month ago

thanks

u encourage me most thats why i feel i can compose and at least in one person confidence i can repose and thats uuuuu who will read all my poems i suppose . another one is about to make it to evolution i made a rainy japs poem HAIKU lost it can i repost anew one and competITion code pl

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

Loved

i will say you always touch my heart with your poetry as you always have "style and grace" beautiful poetry much love shirley harrison

lou

16 years 1 month ago

Loved

lines 1-8 read like someone horrid is going to arrive , but after that it becomes clear is a lover. the reader can tell how strong you feel. There is a dreamy quality that is maintained throughout.The poem flows well. The vocabulary in the poem varied. It is not always grammatically correct, that's part of its charm. Much more conventional, than your work is generally. A lovely romantic poem . love lou xx

Lil Z

16 years 1 month ago