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faithmairee
faithmairee
Jun 25, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

dirty word

we're gonna talk to the menfolk
yeah, we're gonna say how we feel
we're sure gonna draw them closer
just to make things nice and real

what's the use of a voice
if it can't be heard
we feel connected when
we're uttering words

if you're only thinking it
it isn't real
so why don't they
just tell us how they feel

loving words are the sweetest words
(the dearest a woman has ever heard)
i don't know why it just is so
some men make talk a dirty word
— faithmairee, Jun 25, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Florida, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Lawrence Ferlinghetti, Edna St. Vincent Millay, Lucille Clifton and Elizabeth Bishop

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Beauregard

Beauregard

16 years 1 month ago

Hello Faithmariee

I really love the voice in this poem. I can hear a bona fide southern girl in these words. I am a bit confused on 3.1 and 3.2 though. The repetition of "it" at the end of the first line and beginning of the second line really threw me off. I think adjusting a few words would help the clarity in those lines. Maybe "if you’re only thinking [about] it/ it [can't] be real" would do the trick. I would offer more, but I hold back when I see "I appreciate moderate constructive criticism" and/or "Please do not critique mechanics. The inconsistencies in style are intentional, or correcting them is not important to me." Kelsey "In criticism I will be bold, and as sternly, absolutely just with friend and foe. From this purpose nothing shall turn me." -Edgar Allan Poe "If technique is of no interest to a writer, I doubt that the writer is an artist." -Marianne Moore
faithmairee

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You

Hi, Kelsey! Thanks for your feedback and your frienship. I will think about your suggestion. Thanks again, Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
M

magics02

16 years ago

nHello Faith M

I got a little hung up around line 9 and 10 the ending with it and the next line starting with it. Alos just to note the word diry and did you mean dirty? It is nice to meet you and I shall visit you once again. Good poem by the way gal Mona
faithmairee

faithmairee

16 years ago

Hi, Mona

Thanks so much for reading and commentng on my poem. I'm glad you like it. I appreciate your pointing out my typo. I hate when I miss one of them like that. Thanks you also for your frienship. I've added you to my buddy list as well. Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
hobo

hobo

16 years ago

Nice write

Nice write my friend, I have found to few people tell the ones they love just how they feel. I really like the lines if you’re only thinking it it isn’t real so why don’t they just tell us how they feel nice write *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*
faithmairee

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You, My Friend

Thank you for your wonderful remarks but especially for your friendship. I enjoy your work to no end and commenting back and forth on the poetry. ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Great stuff Faith

I see you're already making a lot of friends. It's good to help each other with the little things, it's because we wish to welcome you as a great addition to Neo. I can complain a lot about how men don’t really care about our feelings, this is a good poem expressing this....I love it. Just a few wee added suggestions... loving words are the sweetest words ……………….maybe you don’t need [words] at the end of this sentence? In the last two lines maybe... I don’t know why it is so that men deem talk as a dirty word. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
faithmairee

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank you, Xena

First of all, I would like you to know you have made me feel so welcome here. I couldn't have asked for a better guide. I was delighted to have you as both a guide and a friend. Thank you for taking the time to offer suggestions. While I may not use everyone of them I do appreciate your genuine help. You are never harsh and I like that about you. It is so important I think that when we try to help others with their work that we do it with tact and diplomacy. There is never a need for harshness. I say this because we are sensitive people. Atleast, most of the poets I have known fall close to it. I have been on the receiving end of some of those harsh critics (not here though) and it isn't fun. The bottom line for me is this...If you can't help someone, atleast don't hurt them. Thanks again for everything, Xena. You are a fabulous person and it is an honor to have you for a friend. Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
loved

loved

16 years ago

u say it deeeeeeeeep

and south too where are the men to woooooooo gr8 thoughts urs lovely says loved lovedly
faithmairee

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thanks, loved

Florida has the most manly men i've heard it said, lol...thank you so much for reading and responding to my poem. You made my heart smile! Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
loved

loved

16 years ago

on the other site

...i made a poetic friends with a Floridian girl 24 she considered herself as the tightest AND THE KID kid got sandwiched with a guy of 45 and she wanted him for herself he had five kids his stood up for some other she was left distraught now i know FLORIDA'S men have VIAGRA BOUGHT
chumfin

chumfin

16 years ago

say it out and dont bottle

say it out and dont bottle the feeling. when love some one or have something to say, just say it, yes say it. that is what this poem has just thought now. regards chumfin
M

magics02

16 years ago

I hear this one loud and clearly Faith

Yes I agree some of it is not mannerly but I don't want to come off as too Pollyannish but from my own perspective I never had a man that used the foul mouth in every sentence he said, just ain't my style. LOL I say the occasional cuss word but I do not use it 24/7 in my everyday language. I like your poem gal alot Love at ya Mona
M

magics02

16 years ago

I hear this one loud and clearly Faith

Yes I agree some of it is not mannerly but I don't want to come off as too Pollyannish but from my own perspective I never had a man that used the foul mouth in every sentence he said, just ain't my style. LOL I say the occasional cuss word but I do not use it 24/7 in my everyday language. I like your poem gal alot Love at ya Mona
faithmairee

faithmairee

16 years ago

Dear Mona

Thanks, my friend. This poem is not about cursing but about how some men communicate (or the lack, thereof) with women as though talking about their feelings was wrong. Thanks for dropping in. Much love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
M

magics02

16 years ago

Sorry

But see here how a person can interpret a poem entirely different from someone else, It is all in the readers eyes and thank you for pointing that out and yes the communication a very important aspect of all relationships. Love at ya lady Mona
faithmairee

faithmairee

16 years ago

Dear Mona

No apology is necessary. I know what you mean about interpretation. Thank you for being my friend. Love-Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

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