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OUT OF THE MAELSTROM

With opening of eyes does it begin
   the jostling of the words within
   their yells and shouts preclude thinking
   to make poet stagger, as if drinking

Thank god its not like this most days
   words seeking exit from the maze
   they jumble up not taking turn
   you'd think by now that they would learn

To keep from being made insane
   he grips his writing pen again
   and pauses as he starts perusing
    words to be the first for choosing

All these words now push and fight
   as each one tries to gain the right
   to travel down the nerves and then
   be first to flow out of the author's pen

As each is weighed, sifted and used
   it leaves one less to be abused
   by fellow words whose numbers sink
   as they're evicted via ink

As poem takes shape the swirling slows
   behind eyes satisfaction grows
   proper choice increase the work's length
   each phrase adding to its strength

Within the mind the words now rest
   most of them used, they passed the test
   the scribbler reviews every line
   he now can rest, they look just fine


— scribbler, Jun 24, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Critiques

Rett

Rett

15 years 11 months ago

Scribbler

I enjoyed this. a great depiction of writing. I have one somewhere I wrote called Visit with a Poet that is similar about how bad it is to be around a poet when he is trying to write a poem. I thoroughly enjoyed this read. Now, a couple of wee little spots I had trouble with. Maybe just me, but there they are. To keep from being made insane he grips his writing pen again and pauses as he starts perusing which words to be the first for choosing (it seems to be a syllable or two too many to me) All these words now push and fight as each one tries to gain the right to travel down the nerves and then be first to flow out author’s pen (this line seems to be a syllable short. I keep wanting to stick another one in for smoothness) Other than that, I can't say any more. *G* Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin
S

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

Hmmmm......

Think I'll do a quick edit.Thanks as always for visit and suggestions.....scribbler
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Great stuff Stan

This is so good. Poetry is an important part of our lives and it sure feels good when you get it just the way you want it to read and mean...Brilliant. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
S

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

thanks Zena

It seems sometimes the words demand exit,doesn't it? Come by any time.....scribbler
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

nominated

while i was reading this i was filled with the feeling i have when my muses are visiting (which seems not so often these days) and in full swing. descriptive perfect i felt so i was myself inspired awseome scribble scribbler bookmarked and i wish i could nominate it again love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
S

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

muse

Yes in inspiration it seems to be either feast or famine.I know at some point my pen will run dry and need a break for refilling,especially since I limit myself to mainly one form.Luckily(for me if not others)it hasn't quite gotten to that point yet.Thanks for visit and comments ,and I'm glad I was able to shake muse's cage lol.....scribbler...Oops!also appreciate nom.
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Bravooo Stan big smilethats

Bravooo Stan big smile thats all I can offer at this last stage love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)