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Jun 24, 2010
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OUT OF THE MAELSTROM
With opening of eyes does it begin
the jostling of the words within
their yells and shouts preclude thinking
to make poet stagger, as if drinking
Thank god its not like this most days
words seeking exit from the maze
they jumble up not taking turn
you'd think by now that they would learn
To keep from being made insane
he grips his writing pen again
and pauses as he starts perusing
words to be the first for choosing
All these words now push and fight
as each one tries to gain the right
to travel down the nerves and then
be first to flow out of the author's pen
As each is weighed, sifted and used
it leaves one less to be abused
by fellow words whose numbers sink
as they're evicted via ink
As poem takes shape the swirling slows
behind eyes satisfaction grows
proper choice increase the work's length
each phrase adding to its strength
Within the mind the words now rest
most of them used, they passed the test
the scribbler reviews every line
he now can rest, they look just fine
the jostling of the words within
their yells and shouts preclude thinking
to make poet stagger, as if drinking
Thank god its not like this most days
words seeking exit from the maze
they jumble up not taking turn
you'd think by now that they would learn
To keep from being made insane
he grips his writing pen again
and pauses as he starts perusing
words to be the first for choosing
All these words now push and fight
as each one tries to gain the right
to travel down the nerves and then
be first to flow out of the author's pen
As each is weighed, sifted and used
it leaves one less to be abused
by fellow words whose numbers sink
as they're evicted via ink
As poem takes shape the swirling slows
behind eyes satisfaction grows
proper choice increase the work's length
each phrase adding to its strength
Within the mind the words now rest
most of them used, they passed the test
the scribbler reviews every line
he now can rest, they look just fine
— scribbler, Jun 24, 2010
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Critiques
Rett
15 years 11 months ago
Scribbler
scribbler
15 years 11 months ago
Hmmmm......
xena465
15 years 11 months ago
Great stuff Stan
scribbler
15 years 11 months ago
thanks Zena
judyanne
15 years 11 months ago
nominated
scribbler
15 years 11 months ago
muse
Seren
15 years 11 months ago
Bravooo Stan big smilethats