faithmairee

Jun 24, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

only for a moment

only for a moment
as the rain fell on my face
your body long and lean
played on my memory

it was winter once more
i was lying in your arms
that fireplace ablaze
so far away that place
once known as laurel farms

i was still so unsure
reaching for you in the night
words so softly spoken
as your heart beat close to mine

then the sun came shining
warmed the sand beneath my feet
as quickly as you came
i felt you leave my memory

— faithmairee, Jun 24, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Florida, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Lawrence Ferlinghetti, Edna St. Vincent Millay, Lucille Clifton and Elizabeth Bishop

Critiques

Roscoe Lane

16 years 1 month ago

It's great,

but i think it deserves a better title, that's the only thing i'd change. Feels like Lovely memory, written beautifully.Regards Roscoe..

faithmairee

16 years 1 month ago

Thank You

for your feedback...perhaps a better title is in order...i will consider your suggestion...at any rate, your wonderful comments are deeply appreciated...thanks for taking the time to leave them ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Brilliant

Beautifully written Faith, brought tears to my eyes...I love, love it. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

faithmairee

16 years 1 month ago

Thank You, Xena

Thank you for your wonderful remarks, Xena. They mean alot to me. ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

You're welcome Faith

After reading your poem again, just a suggestion; I think this line would sound better if you omit this word, as you don’t really need it... once {was} known as laurel farms Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

faithmairee

16 years 1 month ago

Thank You Xena

It was a good suggestion you made. Thank you, my friend. ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

raj

16 years 1 month ago

Hello Faith..

this is a lovely expression of memories which keep appearing and dissapearing like a full moon playing hide n seek behind moisture laden clouds of emotions... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)...

faithmairee

16 years ago

Thank You

Thank you so much for your wonderful remarks. You made my heart smile. Best regards, Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

raj

16 years ago

Faith

thats so good to know ,,,because when the heart is smiling thee would be more ripples from which more wonderfull writes get inspired... keep smiling...raj (sublime_ocean)...

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