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Oh Jimmy, How Badly You Stink

 

Oh Jimmy, how badly you stinkSo much so, I can’t really thinkSmell permeates both here and thereI tell you this because I care Oh Jimmy, as you’re coming nearGirls are running away in fearWherever we go I can seePeople laughing at you and me Oh Jimmy, now don’t get uptightBut that smell makes Grandma’s alrightJimmy can you move away please?Stand to close then I’m not at ease It’s not for me though, all for youYou smell so bad and have no clueLooks are good, but from this odorPeople sniff and then fall over
— Lil Z, Jun 24, 2010

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greeneyes

greeneyes

15 years 11 months ago

lol

Oh Lil Z, you are a gem! This was very clever! I loved it. your friend, Elizabeth
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 11 months ago

Nice!

I'm glad you liked it!
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JosephSommers

15 years 11 months ago

Good one Lil z

Ha ha! This reminds me of elementary school. I had to sit next to the stinky kid. His name wasn't jimmy tho.
LZ

Lil Z

15 years 11 months ago

Haha!

Thanks for commenting on this Joseph, I look forward to hearing from you again.
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Teh he he

Very funny...I love it Lil...Ooooh, I hate bad stinks, especially BO!!! Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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Lil Z

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks Xena!

Thank you for your comment! Yeah, my brother had bad B.O. yesterday and that influenced me to write this!
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

stink

HEY!My names not Jimmy lol! Good humorous write but had a few stumbles.I'll Message you with a few suggestions.......scribbler
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Lil Z

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you so much!

Thank you so much Scribbler! I definitely appreciate your input, because this will help me in the long run. Feel free to give your full honest opinion!
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Sara

15 years 11 months ago

Lol a cute poem

Lol, this is a funny poem, and you always have great rhythm and flow, brilliant!