loved

Jun 23, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

THE ULTIMATE deprivation

THE ULTIMATE

WRITE ANY MORE POETRY ,

CONVERSE WITH EITHER

A HE OR SHE

THEN YOU SHALL HAVE

TO DIVORCE ME …

I HATE YOUR TALKING

ACROSS MY BACK

AND

IF YOU CONTINUE

YOU I SHALL HAVE TO SACK

AND

SO I MUST SURRENDER ,

MY DESIRE

TO COMPOSE POETRY ENTIRE

FOR MY SPOUSE ALONE

IS MY LIFE ENTIRE

ALBEIT THERE’S NOTHING ELSE

I AM ABLE TO DO

BUT FOR MY SPOUSE

THIS MUCH I AM OBLIGED TO DO .

SO WAIT

YOU MAY NOT

HEAR FROM ME

TILL I’M BURIED

UNDER THE PALM TREE.

— loved, Jun 23, 2010

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Country/Region: ROU

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xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Loved

Great sincere poem. I'm sure it'll be some time before you're buried under that palm tree. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

lou

16 years 1 month ago

Loved

I loved it lol love lou xx

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

I smiled when I read this as it so clearly depicts the dilema we poets have - trying to juggle our personal and creative lives. There's always someone who demands our attention away from the passion that is writing poetry! Clever thought indeed! Bonita j

loved

16 years 1 month ago

my spouse's angst

My spouse's dilemma YOU UNDERSTAND THE DILEMMA BUT IT CURBS AND DISTURBS IN ONES CREATIVITY YET I RISK IT AS THERE IS NO LIFE WITHOUT A SPOUSE MALE OR FEMALE AND IF YOU HAVE TO ACHIEVE RISK IT EITHER WAY YOU SHALL DECEIVE UNLESS YOU YOURSELF YOUR MINDS WISDOM SEAL AND CONTROL THE CIRCUMSTANCES AND the ENVIRONMENT LAUGH AT YOURSELF THAT SHALL DO HOPEFULLY THE SPOUSE WILL FINALLY GIVEN IN TOO. Please read in SMALL CASE . NO not shouting my eyes I can't blame daily.

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THE ULTIMATE deprivation

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Dear Loved

Loved

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my spouse's angst