Seren

Jun 23, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

As a Verdict of Truth Utters

slide me into a flight suit
shoot me somersaulting
to the stars as I cushion
in ether, to wait,
a solitary orb
dimming

spiked with steel
Fates hand took hold,
she the keeper of answers
secretly and slowly,
spun the arms of time
and found the key
to a treasure

we thought,

we had been patient
until Science and Religion
made a pact with fate

my Pandora's box is opening
and I may just shoot to the stars

— Seren, Jun 23, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

jc

i really have no idea what you are saying but i definiely get my own personal meaning from these wonderful words especially - 'she the keeper of answers secretly and slowly, spun the arms of time and found the key to a treasure' love and hugs judd xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

I would be surprised if anyone will

Some might but this ones as abstract as they come but very relevent to my private life hence the vageness ... will PM you hun love and big hugs and thanks for putting up with my drivel lol JayCee x x x (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)

Professor Purple

15 years 11 months ago

I also get my own personal

I also get my own personal meaning by reading it. I just have one suggestion, since they are personified, it could be Fate, Science, Religion (caps). Antoine

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Good call Antoine will fix

Good call Antoine will fix that up in the edits .. sometimes we write stuff for ourselves and this is one of those poems I know its vague but for me it holds more meaning than a lot of my other poetry thanks for the suggestions love and hugs JayCee (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)

ziggy

15 years 11 months ago

hi

hi jayne i really like how this sounds when spoken as that is something i go for my self as to this ones true meaning i am still guessing chat soon ,,,,,,,,ziggy

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Ziggy

with some time the reason for this one will maybe become obvious for those that remember this poem but then there are so many it probably will be forgotten lol but thats ok too I wrote this one for me and if anyone can take a meaning away from it thats wonderful love and big hugs JayCee (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

truth

can't rate as don't understand.Danger of reach exceeding grasp?.......scribbler

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Stan

thanks anyway ... as I said above I didnt expect many would get this one but thats ok as well smile love JayCee (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)

greeneyes

15 years 11 months ago

This one could mean

This one could mean different things to different people.I know what it meant to me, and it meant alot. Elizabeth

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Elizabeth

thanks so much and I am very very happy you took your own meaning from it ... at the end we writers let our babies go for the minds of a world that will find their own spin for it thanks again love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

magics02

15 years 11 months ago

Shoot me to the stars

Riding on a wing of a unicorn..I like this one loved the calmness and simplicity of gentle rhythms in my ears..lovely Jayne Hope you are feeling better friend Love,Mona xoxoo

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Mona

I am glad you liked this one hun its a bit vague but as the poet its my write lol and not everyones going to like it or even understand it ... but for me it holds much meaning love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Brilliant, just Brilliant JayCee.

Ha, ha, I laugh at your descriptions of how you’re feeling, not at your feelings. For me this sounds like you’d be better off getting the hell off this planet before Pandora’s box does open and the Sh** hits the fan for all humanity. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

I used the space metaphor

I used the space metaphor ... for the waiting in status kind of feeling floating as a star ... and Pandoras box opening well there is a personal meaning for that one lol thanks so much for the comment lol and yep somersaulting to the moon ;) love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

wonderful JC

i see this as your hope and faith in a truth of justice "if that makes sense" L:O:L as i had to read many times, very very deep but also very strongly written! with much love shirley harrison

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

wonderful JC

i see this as your hope and faith in a truth the justice of truth "if that makes sense" L:O:L as i had to read many times, very very deep but also very strongly written! with much love shirley harrison

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Waiting on a justice of

Waiting on a justice of truth maybe ... but past that as well hard to say ... but I am glad you found something worthy to comment on and to be real honest I didnt expect many comments on this one lol love and big hugs JayCee x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

The visuals here...

are as stunning as usual. No matter what the meaning, and for whom, I see you cart-wheeling through space in a suit. A spiked leather glove spinning a roulette wheel. Science, religion, and fate all in the black. And as the wheel stops and the ball settles, they give each other high-fives! You are the winner! Love ya, hig bugs, ~ Gee

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

LMAO I loved your vision …

LMAO I loved your vision ... its bloody close but not the whole banana, privately someone was talking to me today and they Nailed the meaning ... which shocked me considerably lol but I have to say it was a nice surprise love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

lou

15 years 11 months ago

JayCee

Tried to find fault , but could'nt love lou xx