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greeneyes
greeneyes
Jun 23, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

From The Corner Of My Eye

From the corner of my eye,
You whisper love in my ear,
But when I stare straight ahead,
It's  for someone else to hear.

From the corner of my eye,
You smile down at me,
When I stare straight ahead,
It's for someone else to see.

From the corner of my eye,
Your loving touch is real,
When I stare straight ahead,
It's for someone else to feel.

From the corner of my eye,
Our lips meet in sublime bliss,
When I stare straight ahead,
It's someone else you kiss.

From the corner of my eye,
We dance a lover's waltz,
When I stare straight ahead,
This fantasy is false.

I can not face reality,
No matter how I try,
So I will live for eternity,
From the corner of my eye.
— greeneyes, Jun 23, 2010

About the Author

Country/Region: Colorado Springs Colorado

Favorite Poets: I love Dr. Suess! He is my favorite, I would love to write for children.

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loved

loved

16 years 1 month ago

THIS APPEARS

...LIKE A 69 JUXTAPOSITION KEEP CONTROL OF YOUR LOVELY GREEN EYES VERY FEW HAVE GREEN EYES
loved

loved

16 years 1 month ago

THANK U 22222222

THE ULTIMATE WRITE ANY MORE POETRY , CONVERSE WITH EITHER A HE OR SHE THEN YOU SHALL HAVE TO DIVORCE ME ... I HATE YOUR TALKING ACROSS MY BACK AND IF YOU CONTINUE YOU I SHALL HAVE TO SACK AND SO I MUST SURRENDER , MY DESIRE TO COMPOSE POETRY ENTIRE FOR MY SPOUSE ALONE IS MY LIFE ENTIRE ALBEIT THERE'S NOTHING ELSE I AM ABLE TO DO BUT FOR MY SPOUSE THIS MUCH I AM OBLIGED TO DO . SO WAIT YOU MAY NOT HEAR FROM ME TILL I'M BURIED UNDER THE PALM TREE.
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Elizabeth

Another brilliant write. Great rhythm and flow. I've been in this situation so many times, it's heartbreaking. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
hobo

hobo

16 years 1 month ago

Wow

Wow this is really good. I espically like the lines YI can not face reality, No matter how I try, So I will live for eternity, From the corner of my eye. Very nice write my friend You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down
Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

16 years 1 month ago

Great,

i tip my hat to you again, it's another beauty from the corner of your green eyes. Love Roscoe..
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poewriter58

16 years 1 month ago

Green Eyes

Perfection at it's best . I see nothing to correct, add to or otherwise. Beautiful but sad poem Chrys
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Very nice lady friend

Bravo to you girl and I am happy for you. This one packs a punch. loved the flow of it and the wordings just great gal!! Love,Mona
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Elizabeth

that we could live in eternity in just in the corner of our eyes lovely poem hun love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
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shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

This is just brilliance!

Dear Green eyes, your poetry is sublime! really wonderful! it just rolled off of my tongue ! much love shirley harrison
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raj

16 years ago

from the corner of my eyes i

from the corner of my eyes i caught this one in spotlight once was not enough so i read it twice at first i wondered why you kept looking ahead then i discovered it's the other side of you.. well scripted..makes the reader follow in your foot steps.. warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Elizabeth

Here I am, late as usual. I can tell you have done much work on this piece. It is smack full of emotion. Hauntingly great. Favorite lines: can not face reality, No matter how I try, So I will live for eternity, From the corner of my eye. but the rest of the verses were also incomparable. I loved the whole poem. Love, Cat

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